Camoflawge. Vs. Smirnoff

[Camoflawge.]

10 lines...
House rules
Blah,blah,blah...

All in the title, anyone for 10-12 lines, set it up and we'll do it ASAP Only way I'll improve is through practice

he's trying to get better and I'm just gonna barely try in this bout
cause Id say he got room for improvement...
..but it's more like the size of a house

Coming into this thread proud of the name Casanova
I’m just here to wake you up like that folgers

he likes guys in his mouth, riding cas he'd love to taste his nut
fuck breakfast in bed, he'd rather use a blowjob to wake him up
he fake as fuck but his name deserve credit for workin models
all the chicks want some smirnoff....when it's served in bottles
they say laughter is the best medicine 'n if that's it's purpose
...line up all the cancer patients and let them read his verses
after this.... someone'll need to help this queer off the ground
u'd think RB hate liquor..cause no1 want this smirnoff around


Don't understand something? Fuck off.

[Camoflawge.]

I’m the obvious underdog her in this discussion,
But I don’t care cause I came to spit somethin
Truth immersed in my lyrics like stuffin,
You’re called Camoflawdge cause you hide in vagina’s muffin //
Keep cluckin cause you’re worth nothin,
A chicken on the choppin block you’re ready for the pluckin
Or should I say suckin,
Cause the only Camo you wear is borrowed from your tranny cousin //
That’s nothin compared to your frontin,
You say you’re camouflaged but I see you’re bluffin
The odd one in the bakers dozen,
You face down in the sheets is what you call “Makin lovin” //
I’m just dusting off this bitch,
Got a two more bars to prove he ain’t worth shit
I’ll it him with a clip dipped in psychedelic acid,
Penetrates him more viciously than asthmatics gaspin //
You just keep trying to fake skill,
I don’t believe anyone here wants run of the mill
I’m a new rung on the wheel, I stay strung on the reel,
Next up is you getting hung on the hill //

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...31&postcount=2

[.deadproof.]

Re: Camoflawge. Vs. Smirnoff
Im the underdog her in this discussion,

dude don't diss yourself in the opening line..

U had nothing special except some off bars and stretched lines


Camo u took this easy, nice closer. made me lol. haha <-- see u just made me do it again

vote - camo.. The other guy. Ur good just not at cams lvl.

[TopDolla]

Camo:

he's trying to get better and I'm just gonna barely try in this bout
cause Id say he got room for improvement...
..but it's more like the size of a house
^ lol nice way to open, straight to it....no small talk

he likes guys in his mouth, riding cas he'd love to taste his nut
fuck breakfast in bed, he'd rather use a blowjob to wake him up
^ decent

he fake as fuck but his name deserve credit for workin models
all the chicks want some smirnoff....when it's served in bottles
^ woooh! good shit

they say laughter is the best medicine 'n if that's it's purpose
...line up all the cancer patients and let them read his verses
^ hahaha!

after this.... someone'll need to help this queer off the ground
u'd think RB hate liquor..cause no1 want this smirnoff around
^ okay closer

Smirnoff:
I don't feel like breaking your part down, not being unfair or anything fam, but this was a 10-12 line battle and you spit 20, let me give you some adivce though...try to be more personal, find shit they've done before, be clever and use those against them, the truth hurts, and everyone knows that, check their profile and find something that you can turn funny and just twist to being something about them, and use it as a weapon, also try to incorperate some punchlines as well, nameplays are also very effective if you use them write, i don't want to clog your guy's battle with this shit, so if you want me to go more in depth, then just PM me fam, i was once on your level, and i would be glad to help you out...

As for this battle, it's hands down to Camo, he just had more punches and his wording was just right every single time....good job

Vote = Camo

[Camoflawge.]

Up. Leave links, I'll RTF.

[5m1rn0ff]

Dolla -- Thanks a lot for the feedback. Like I've said before, battling is not something I have any experience with (and I"m also super new to this site in general =P). Thanks to everyone who gave feedback, and thanks camo for the opportunity.

[5m1rn0ff]

Up -- anymore votes?

[~feed-back~]

camo wtf... he wanted to practice n get better, not get slaughtered... i thought you'd take it easy on'em but nah... smh lol

smir, keep going though...i didnt feel anything was to harsh or enough to actually diss him.

V/ Camo

[Vallus]

vote camo

harder hitting punches overall....smirnoff, you need to incorporate
a solid rhyme scheme and some wittier concepts if you hope to
start winning battles man, your stuff is way too simplistic
at the moment man....

[A. Karpis]

wow, a room for improvement line? lmao



decent name-plays....nuthun special at all....the laughter best medicine is played too....
im guessin u didnt try becuz of the comp?


unno, smirnoff....wow

talkin bout vagina muffins and shit lol.....c'mon now, only thing i give u props for is actually tryin to rhyme the whole time....but this is text not fuckin audio....

im not breakin this down i just wanted to throw my 2 cents in there....i saw camo's name and thought this might be good but i was wrong lmao


vote=camo