stop swaying, this isn't allowed - phlymo
stop swaying, this isn't allowed - phlymo
Last edited by phlymo; August 5th, 2009 at 07:11 PM
See, Bar's concepts'll disgust us forever & a third day
So you know he'll try to make amends...into a forced & wack wordplay
not bad, not real insulting.
Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
alright
Faced hens, dios, $pit, toke in their prime? i'm not denying
Yea you we're a champ at the bit... of league the vets stopped trying
i don't like the wording, seemed like u rushed putting this one together
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
concepts decent, don't like where u took it
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
nahh
Bar'll have a laugh, but that in his lines stays impossible
Cuz he's known to take a joke... then ruin it in every way possible
nah
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
i like the idea here
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
nah
vs.
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
nah
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
i think this is kind of a fresh idea, i dig the visual aspect
Have ya'll noticed how fake he is? everything he says is make-believe shit
but I knew he had a crafty tongue, the same one he licks his anal beads with..
needs more relation i think, it's easy to get and demeaning but needs more to it to be dope
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
eh
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
played idea
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
very played
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
also played
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
eh
really weird battle. actually, i don't know, i felt like bar's wording and execution were better but the concepts really didn't bring enough here in terms of shit that i haven't seen. truc wins cuz he was fresher. over half of bar's verse was not fresh enough for me to like.
vote truculent easy.
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See, Bar's concepts'll disgust us forever & a third day
So you know he'll try to make amends...into a forced & wack wordplay
nah. the "..." led to no witty or interesting misdirection.
Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
played concept. coulda been flipped better
Faced hens, dios, $pit, toke in their prime? i'm not denying
Yea you we're a champ at the bit... of league the vets stopped trying
again, the "..." didnt help out this bar
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
i dont really get it, sorrry. blame it on the wording
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
ok idea. alittle bland
Bar'll have a laugh, but that in his lines stays impossible
Cuz he's known to take a joke... then ruin it in every way possible
BOOOOOOO @ rhyming possible with impossible
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
ehh
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
nah
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
ok
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
i liked the idea but not the wording
Have ya'll noticed how fake he is? everything he says is make-believe shit
but I knew he had a crafty tongue, the same one he licks his anal beads with..
eh
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
ok
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
ehh. ooold concept
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
played
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
played
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
ok
yea i guess punch took this pretty easily even tho he dropped below par for his standards. wasnt impressed by truc at all this week, maybe his luck ran out idk. but yea, bar wins.
blackeloheimannunakirap
See, Bar's concepts'll disgust us forever & a third day
So you know he'll try to make amends...into a forced & wack wordplay
decent
Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
good concept, wording was ok
Faced hens, dios, $pit, toke in their prime? i'm not denying
Yea you we're a champ at the bit... of league the vets stopped trying
good personal
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
seen the second line before, ok flip though
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
good misdirection, solid bar
Bar'll have a laugh, but that in his lines stays impossible
Cuz he's known to take a joke... then ruin it in every way possible
pretty good
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
funny take on the symbol, decent bar
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
solid closer
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
ok, good set up and execution
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
lol, pretty funny
Have ya'll noticed how fake he is? everything he says is make-believe shit
but I knew he had a crafty tongue, the same one he licks his anal beads with..
solid set up and execution, concept was okish
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
good personal
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
solid hit
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
another pretty good personal
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
looks like a punch I used a few battles ago in FL
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
good concept and set up, execution a lil bit off
It was a close battle, both had some pretty good hits and
some misses aswell....Truc had some lines that I'm more
accustomed to seeing like "he ruins jokes" or
"I put a stop to his rappin" some decent misdirections
and flips in there though Bar on the other hand had more
polished wording and had a few more personals that
hit pretty well..
so..
Vote = Barcotic
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Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
sorta playedish but worded aight
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
fresh concept, coulda been worded better
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
decent,
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
nice
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
meh, aightish closer
vs.
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
nice
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
dope
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
nice
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
V/B
more consistency and quotables, a couple of playedish concepts on both parts but Bar came stronger imo, but the wroding was cool and that really saved those concepts from coming off weak.
^as you noticed i stopped grading lines after a while cuz it was obvious Bar took it, this was way better than your FL champ verse i seen a while back.
See, Bar's concepts'll disgust us forever & a third day
So you know he'll try to make amends...into a forced & wack wordplay
aiight-ish
Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
nah
Faced hens, dios, $pit, toke in their prime? i'm not denying
Yea you we're a champ at the bit... of league the vets stopped trying
aiight
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
not feelin it..
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
weak
Bar'll have a laugh, but that in his lines stays impossible
Cuz he's known to take a joke... then ruin it in every way possible
not a bad flip
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
wording seems wack as fuck.. concept's coo
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
not a fan of this type of punch..
vs
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
aiight..
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
coo..
Have ya'll noticed how fake he is? everything he says is make-believe shit
but I knew he had a crafty tongue, the same one he licks his anal beads with..
nah, wack
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
not feelin it
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
lol, coo
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
nah.. I've seen april fools jokes..
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
not feelin the wording here at all
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
coo-ish..
the better concepts/and hits here belong to barcotic..
there were NO haymakers in this battle, nothing that connected
so hard that it embarassed the opponent.. kind've dissapointing,
but eh.. what can ya do besides bitch? this match should've been
a lot better but it wasn't.. barcotic had more lines that hit..
vote Bar
See, Bar's concepts'll disgust us forever & a third day
So you know he'll try to make amends...into a forced & wack wordplay
lol
Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
nahhh
Faced hens, dios, $pit, toke in their prime? i'm not denying
Yea you we're a champ at the bit... of league the vets stopped trying
not feeling
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
lol dope
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
played
Bar'll have a laugh, but that in his lines stays impossible
Cuz he's known to take a joke... then ruin it in every way possible
ehh
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
dope wp
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
wasn't feeling the wording
couple dope bars. a few played. the opener was funny.
vs
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
lol not bad
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
dope wp
Have ya'll noticed how fake he is? everything he says is make-believe shit
but I knew he had a crafty tongue, the same one he licks his anal beads with..
.. nah
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
wouldve been better if you were a bostonian using that line
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
ehh wasn't feeling
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
naahh
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
cool nameplay
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
not bad
couple nice lines. some wordplays and nameplay mixes
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pretty close battle. i think some of trucs punches had really nice impact, but he could've used better material to start off with and increase the harshness. both had some nice wp. i think bar kept more consistency and harshness with a steady flow.
v/Barcotic
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See, Bar's concepts'll disgust us forever & a third day
So you know he'll try to make amends...into a forced & wack wordplay
Okay personal, but i think u coulda done a lot more with it.
Your just another reason why this is drained an it's played
If you think you took text by storm, it's cuz YOU rained on it's parade
nice one, i like the way you used this concept and the wording made it sound harsh
Faced hens, dios, $pit, toke in their prime? i'm not denying
Yea you we're a champ at the bit... of league the vets stopped trying
true, but lines like this are pretty old n' have been done all over the net tons of times
Strainin me? ..i'll tear bodies apart if a welps attackin words
This battles only nerveracking for me, cuz yours'll be on a shelf afterwards
I think u really did all u could with this concept, it wasn't bad, but it wasn't anything special either
This is your life, text & alcohol so when I impede ya hopes
Just get whiskey or whatever ail's you... will need to cope
nah, ail stuff is played
Bar'll have a laugh, but that in his lines stays impossible
Cuz he's known to take a joke... then ruin it in every way possible
redirection on this line was just too simple to really be effective
Lama's verdict wasn't convincing & i've got the bite signals
So you can forget guns... only c'in rounds as copyright symbols ©
the concept here is good, but the wording just seemed a little off
I end careers, this is text but Bar'll still flunk & flop in rap
Cuz after this, you droppin verses. <---- I just put a fuckin stop to that
this is like super played, not a good way to close
vs.
....Fuck Truc..
Don't let his undefeated record fool you and don't forget he's a rookie
he won by a cunt hair last week, and sadly, that's the closest he'll get to a pussy..
this woulda been pretty dope, but u can't flip something that you said about him into a punch, it just takes away all the credibility. this only works if someone else said it
He looks for his concepts in underground tracks, this dude's a song hunter
we just hope he fucks with some Limewire.. on a bomb and it's the wrong color..
nice, creative and the wording was good, dope shit
Have ya'll noticed how fake he is? everything he says is make-believe shit
but I knew he had a crafty tongue, the same one he licks his anal beads with..
nahhhh, this was pretty newbish to be honest
Americans tend to act bitter towards Canadians, meh, I just get mad back
but if Truc's wack shit stays Bruin, our sport might never stop gettin' laughed at..
nah, i done Bruin wordplay before n' so have many others, its played
I don't feel sorry for him, there's kids in the world that are fuckin' starvin'
and if sad shit hits close to home, Truc's rap should be thrown in a public garbage..
its okay, you worded it well, but there wasn't much more you could do with this concept
He's been here for about four months now and still isn't decent or dope
and I'm willing to bet that he joined in April so he has an excuse for bein' a joke..
i liked this, even tho it was pretty simple. surprised i never seen it before
I'm pretty damn popular here, like a celebrity, nobody's doubting me yet
and if ya'll are starstruck.. might mistake you for the ones surrounding his head..
nah, i think the wording on this was just a little off
He's gotten lucky in every battle, fuck the usual "teach him a lesson" shit
he called The Ark a pile of wreckage last week, now his body's sinking next to it....
simple but decent closer
I broke it down bar by bar cuz its a champ match, and from reading my comments, y'all can probably tell I was pretty disappointed with this match and feelin' like I shoulda been in it myself. Most of the stuff in here was either played or just okay and not really something that stood out. I really liked Truc's text by a storm thing, but the opener was okay, but that was really it. His closer really brought him down. Bar's limewire thing was dope, and the april fools day and closer were decent, but that was about it. In the end, I think Truc had a few too many lines that were just executed too simply and Bar just barely got this.
Vote - Barcotic
Barcotic wins (5 - 0)
Truculent loses (4 - 1)
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