LLL Season 11: Week 5
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LLL Season 11: Week 5
Standard Rules (can be found in LLL Office)
Check in by Wednesday
Drop by Midnight Friday (Eastern Time)
16 Lines Minimum
Vote on 5 Battles
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Good Luck
im thinking 20
i'm stomping dreams, but you're leaving trampled and tattered
cuz soon as i step on the scene you'll watch your fantasy shatter
you can't hang with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, we're one cut from your face waving surrender
i'm sweeping this every which way, bitches know that your hooks wack
you're excludin' one category
but after tasting my dick that slut never looked back
fuck the posts and awards, face the facts at rap texting your worthless
so if you're in the running its only the record for wack consecutive verses
you barely beat cry and sin city! it nothing to end your drive to the crown nerd
shit.. every first born's been so ugly china revised its child policy downward
you're a creepy old man, take it slowly cuz i riddle whores
i wanted a real battle, not to study texting from the civil war
you running the site's a joke so how the fuck you gonna murder cats
i'd say draw the line somewhere but you're even letting burden back!
been dropping lame your whole life, you've never heard your raps get applauded
but doctors be rofl.. like what kind of fag dies of natural clauses
Last edited by The Commisioner; August 8th, 2009 at 12:13 AM
Last week...
^^^Re: The Commisioner (2 - 1) vs. Nick (2 - 1)
i'm stomping dreams, but you're leaving trampled and tattered
cuz soon as i step on the scene you'll watch your fantasy shatter
my raps are out of this world so trust i'll be sledging your face mate
shit.. my shot's puttnik so far russia'll leap ahead in the space race
it's well known that your clout's a wreck, stupid bitch you can't trounce a vet
imma take you to school.. cuz its the only place left to go from your house arrest
dumb motherfucker, if you think you're nice you're a real fool
as far as we can tell
your biggest drug problem was not taking enough to actually kill you
your win last week was nothing, for me its nothing to slay a chump
i ain't into theater
but even i know they only give tonys to cats who are gay as fuck
you can't spit with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, what's left will be waving surrender
i'm sweeping this every which way, bitch its known that your hooks' wack
you're excludin' one category
but after tasting my dick she never looked back
shits a wrap, against a true pro you're defenseless
this gone from golden child
to the pawn shop making your mom throw in a necklace
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
This dude looks like a lady and ya records so hoax...
S'like Steven Tyler fell off THREE stages...
The way all ya wins were no shows.
You're an idiot, fuckin fool, who fails every test due...
Out of 100, would be a bit above average for you.Originally Posted by The Commisioner
Tryin to act Gordon, but the name ya claim will never outdo me...
Commisioner's just a sidekick who played dead through most of the movie.
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
I'm mean and unruly, truly brooding bout recent times...
Thought being de-admined was pretty shitty, until I saw your shittier rhyme.
Going beast on this Pretender, bringin mad rape like rabies...
But I'll get a big thanks...
Cuz Chrissie Hynde ain't had a hit since the 80's.
Cunt can't hang in this league, no title but truth for a fool...
I'll have this bitch leave the competition like he's Paula Abdul.
Ouch!
1st off, Commish.. you used 3 bars that you used against Nick last week.. I know Nick didn't show, but you did leave your verse up.. and if that isn't recycling, it DOES take a lot away from those bars.. I was expecting to see a whole new verse.. meh.. moving on to the quotables/vote..
you running the site's a joke so how the fuck you gonna murder cats
i'd say draw the line somewhere but you're even letting burden back!
Vs
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
This dude looks like a lady and ya records so hoax...
S'like Steven Tyler fell off THREE stages...
The way all ya wins were no shows.
You're an idiot, fuckin fool, who fails every test due...
Out of 100, would be a bit above average for you.
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
Ehh.. Commish, you didn't have a very good verse at all in my opinion.. the "first born/China" concept had TONS of potential, but it was worded so horribly that I couldn't even quote it.. also, I might have quoted the "flapping jaw/waving surrender" bar, but you used it last week, and to me, that took a lot away from it.. that one personal that I quoted was really the only cool bar in your verse, and even that wasn't amazing.. other than that and what I've already mentioned, every other bar was just corny and/or had no sting at all..
Born, you're verse started out pretty cool, with a couple of funny and true personals.. there might have been a few minor spots in your wording, but the quotables were still cool.. after that tho, for the most part, you fell off.. but you clearly did enough to win this by a couple bars.. congrats....
\\//ote: Born To Kill
Last edited by Barcotic; August 8th, 2009 at 01:48 AM
I'm not gonna act like I read those bars in your no show battle, but I am gonna say COME ON MAN, have more creativity. at least I could pop out 20-30 line FRESH new verses for EVERY no show win I had last season.. what's your excuse?
i'm stomping dreams, but you're leaving trampled and tattered
cuz soon as i step on the scene you'll watch your fantasy shatter
eh aiight, seems basic as fuck
you can't hang with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, we're one cut from your face waving surrender
lol, aiight coo
i'm sweeping this every which way, bitches know that your hooks wack
you're excludin' one category
but after tasting my dick that slut never looked back
eh, dunno.. I've seen a lot of "ex" wordplays, this one wasn't the most creative of them all either..
fuck the posts and awards, face the facts at rap texting your worthless
so if you're in the running its only the record for wack consecutive verses
aiight
you barely beat cry and sin city! it nothing to end your drive to the crown nerd
shit.. every first born's been so ugly china revised its child policy downward
wording seems off, but coo idea, his name is kind've hard to flip originally..
you're a creepy old man, take it slowly cuz i riddle whores
i wanted a real battle, not to study texting from the civil war
dope..
you running the site's a joke so how the fuck you gonna murder cats
i'd say draw the line somewhere but you're even letting burden back!
eh, okay.
been dropping lame your whole life, you've never heard your raps get applauded
but doctors be rofl.. like what kind of fag dies of natural clauses
not feelin this either..
vs
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
lmao.. good find
This dude looks like a lady and ya records so hoax...
S'like Steven Tyler fell off THREE stages...
The way all ya wins were no shows.
aiight
You're an idiot, fuckin fool, who fails every test due...
Out of 100, would be a bit above average for you.
decent
Tryin to act Gordon, but the name ya claim will never outdo me...
Commisioner's just a sidekick who played dead through most of the movie.
hah, nice batman play.. enjoyed this
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
coo, coo..
I'm mean and unruly, truly brooding bout recent times...
Thought being de-admined was pretty shitty, until I saw your shittier rhyme.
concept's cool, dunno if I liked how you executed tho
Going beast on this Pretender, bringin mad rape like rabies...
But I'll get a big thanks...
Cuz Chrissie Hynde ain't had a hit since the 80's.
blah, not feelin it
Cunt can't hang in this league, no title but truth for a fool...
I'll have this bitch leave the competition like he's Paula Abdul.
weak
pretty decent contendors match.. think born had more connections tho..
comish had a few good hits, and a couple okay ideas.. other than that
vote Born..
fuck the posts and awards, face the facts at rap texting your worthless
so if you're in the running its only the record for wack consecutive verses
you barely beat cry and sin city! it nothing to end your drive to the crown nerd
shit.. every first born's been so ugly china revised its child policy downward
vs.
^^^
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
Tryin to act Gordon, but the name ya claim will never outdo me...
Commisioner's just a sidekick who played dead through most of the movie.
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
Going beast on this Pretender, bringin mad rape like rabies...
But I'll get a big thanks...
Cuz Chrissie Hynde ain't had a hit since the 80's.
I think Born got this fairly easily. Commish, ur verse was just lacking in creativity. The two bars I quoted were decent, but everything else didn't do much for me. Like the step on the scene line, there just wasn't really a diss in there, it was more of a statement. The civil war/old thing I guess coulda been something, but u worded it too simply.. with some extra wordplay or something, u coulda made it dope. Burden line, also coulda been a good personal, but u just kinda stated the obvious rather than doing something witty with it. Born, u had a good amount of quotables, and the opener was pretty much a KO type punch, ouch. The other quotables were decent, and the rest of ya verse was fairly consistent. Only things I wasn't really feelin were the thinkin 20 cuz that was a pretty ehh way to use the quote and the closer ya coulda done a lot more with, but again, I think ur verse showed a lot more wit and creativity than Commish
Vote - Born
i'm stomping dreams, but you're leaving trampled and tattered
cuz soon as i step on the scene you'll watch your fantasy shatter
weak
you can't hang with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, we're one cut from your face waving surrender
lol not bad
i'm sweeping this every which way, bitches know that your hooks wack
you're excludin' one category
but after tasting my dick that slut never looked back
nahh
fuck the posts and awards, face the facts at rap texting your worthless
so if you're in the running its only the record for wack consecutive verses
ok
you barely beat cry and sin city! it nothing to end your drive to the crown nerd
shit.. every first born's been so ugly china revised its child policy downward
nahh
you're a creepy old man, take it slowly cuz i riddle whores
i wanted a real battle, not to study texting from the civil war
lol good
you running the site's a joke so how the fuck you gonna murder cats
i'd say draw the line somewhere but you're even letting burden back!
ok
been dropping lame your whole life, you've never heard your raps get applauded
but doctors be rofl.. like what kind of fag dies of natural clauses
nahh
straight punches, some of them had a couple of setup issues, harshness was there and the flow was pretty nice.
vs
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
LOL oh man
This dude looks like a lady and ya records so hoax...
S'like Steven Tyler fell off THREE stages...
The way all ya wins were no shows.
ehhh decent
You're an idiot, fuckin fool, who fails every test due...
Quote:
Originally Posted by The Commisioner
im thinking 20
Out of 100, would be a bit above average for you.
hehe
Tryin to act Gordon, but the name ya claim will never outdo me...
Commisioner's just a sidekick who played dead through most of the movie.
ok
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
lol
I'm mean and unruly, truly brooding bout recent times...
Thought being de-admined was pretty shitty, until I saw your shittier rhyme.
ehhh, not really
Going beast on this Pretender, bringin mad rape like rabies...
But I'll get a big thanks...
Cuz Chrissie Hynde ain't had a hit since the 80's.
ehh
Cunt can't hang in this league, no title but truth for a fool...
I'll have this bitch leave the competition like he's Paula Abdul.
wasnt feeling it
born, that was one funny ass verse, a lot of relevant punches and the recycle exposing was just the icing on that cakewalk.
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first off i know almost everyone recycles, but i'd like to note that its really fucking gay and disrespectful to the aspiring artists who take the time to think up something fresh. even if it isnt as rememerable as the lines from 3 weeks/years ago. I think born boxed commish out on this, not just because he showed the bars reused, but also clowned on it hard.
v/BTK
GreaterDesignGrowers.com
Im not a rapper, im a gardener
you can't hang with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, we're one cut from your face waving surrender
you running the site's a joke so how the fuck you gonna murder cats
i'd say draw the line somewhere but you're even letting burden back!
vs.
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
You're an idiot, fuckin fool, who fails every test due...
im thinking 20
Out of 100, would be a bit above average for you.
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
Going beast on this Pretender, bringin mad rape like rabies...
But I'll get a big thanks...
Cuz Chrissie Hynde ain't had a hit since the 80's.
Commish - wasn't feeling your punches had sting in most of your bars, the one's i quoted we're above average though, overall average verse.
BTK - nice, you were very consistent and had some creative concepts. I quoted 4 from you, they were all pretty nice.
Vote - BTK easy.
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you barely beat cry and sin city! it nothing to end your drive to the crown nerd
shit.. every first born's been so ugly china revised its child policy downward
you're a creepy old man, take it slowly cuz i riddle whores
i wanted a real battle, not to study texting from the civil war
.......VS
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
WOW COMM ALL THAT SHIT U WAS TALKING IN THE THE CHAT AND u end up reusing 2 bars from a previous battle ...wow be orginal bro no hate cuz u had some str8 punches but those two recycled bars fucked u all up overall str8 verse had some aight punches and decent wording and structure but I felt like u coukld've did better
BTK ya verse was str8 the opener was a decent personal.....overall ya verse is str8 too but I felt like you could've been more consistant overall str8 battle but I did expect better v.btk
The words I write are oxygen to greatness.
you can't hang with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, we're one cut from your face waving surrender
VS
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
Tryin to act Gordon, but the name ya claim will never outdo me...
Commisioner's just a sidekick who played dead through most of the movie.
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
Damn commish i woulda thought youd have more respect for the league then reuse bars from the week before in a fuckin contenders match. not to mention the recycled bars were clearly the best ones of your verse. BTK dropped solid n more then enough to take the win here.
i'm stomping dreams, but you're leaving trampled and tattered
cuz soon as i step on the scene you'll watch your fantasy shatter
eh
you can't hang with the bravest contender, i slice the lamest pretenders
so fuck flapping your jaw, we're one cut from your face waving surrender
lmao. nice. never seen this flip before
i'm sweeping this every which way, bitches know that your hooks wack
you're excludin' one category
but after tasting my dick that slut never looked back
meh
fuck the posts and awards, face the facts at rap texting your worthless
so if you're in the running its only the record for wack consecutive verses
eh
you barely beat cry and sin city! it nothing to end your drive to the crown nerd
shit.. every first born's been so ugly china revised its child policy downward
ok
you're a creepy old man, take it slowly cuz i riddle whores
i wanted a real battle, not to study texting from the civil war
ok
you running the site's a joke so how the fuck you gonna murder cats
i'd say draw the line somewhere but you're even letting burden back!
decent
been dropping lame your whole life, you've never heard your raps get applauded
but doctors be rofl.. like what kind of fag dies of natural clauses
nah
This is one dizzy bitch who shouldn't be here in the mix...
Ya so shocked from ya vics, you think you're still battling Nick.
eh
This dude looks like a lady and ya records so hoax...
S'like Steven Tyler fell off THREE stages...
The way all ya wins were no shows.
eh
You're an idiot, fuckin fool, who fails every test due...
Out of 100, would be a bit above average for you.
lol
Tryin to act Gordon, but the name ya claim will never outdo me...
Commisioner's just a sidekick who played dead through most of the movie.
eh
Ya gonna get punched a bunch, might even rupture ya spleen...
Commish gonna reel and spin so much you'll earn 10 as a floor routine.
lmao
I'm mean and unruly, truly brooding bout recent times...
Thought being de-admined was pretty shitty, until I saw your shittier rhyme.
eh
Going beast on this Pretender, bringin mad rape like rabies...
But I'll get a big thanks...
Cuz Chrissie Hynde ain't had a hit since the 80's.
nah
Cunt can't hang in this league, no title but truth for a fool...
I'll have this bitch leave the competition like he's Paula Abdul.
nah
honestly, i never read commisioners battle last week & didnt know he had used some bars until i read btk's verse so it was all fresh to me. that aside i thought he came ok with a few nice ideas but alot i wasnt feeling. i can say the same thing for borns verse. some nice shit, solid wording, but alot of concepts were too weird for me. idk. all in all i was feelin coms verse slightly more in the concepts & punch dept..
v/commish
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Born To Kill wins (4 - 1)
The Commisioner loses (3 - 2)
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