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    Slaves to the Books

    Slaves to the Books
    by SyaNidal

    Born into a time, when bein’ poor was just fine
    I was happy nonetheless just explorin’ the sunshine
    Every mornin’ was adorin’ - wakin’ on the floor
    -and;
    even the most morbid, horrid pourin’ still seemed sublime
    But we were victims of gun crime, who sifted the front lines
    Gifted with one life that was shipped over rough tides
    Shoved below the decks in the darkness of shut eyes
    Sparks in the gut fly, this is part of where love hides
    As they take me to their land; do they realize I love mine?
    Where just bein’ a kid, growin’ up – wasn’t a tough time!
    Breathed with our lungs tied, how I’m missin’ the kisses
    Wishin’ for visits of lips this exquisite and some pride.

    Seems like I’ve been under this deck, for an eternity now
    ‘til I heard the beach plow beneath the boats murdering bow.
    They’re not concerned with me – how I’m shackled and locked
    In a practical spot, for selling males, with the blackest in stock
    In fact with this plot; he’s sellin’ chains by the family
    I was the purchase, forced to work with slaves by the stampede
    Two years pass, I’m fuckin’ amazed and I can’t breathe
    Insane - in a daze, seein’ the face that my hands seek
    Plus I can’t speak; best to know I get lashes for that
    If I show signs of love, there’s a man crackin’ my back
    With a whip at the tip, “do it for the chick ‘cause she’s sick,
    Or do it for the love; that you missed on the ship.”


    We couldn’t read or write, just slaves to the books
    And a bastard of a master; we gave and he took
    He slays when we look – to teach ourselves anything
    Toward self bettering or knowledge to spell, lettering
    So tell me, who’s the better king – the slave or the master
    One digs the grave to his laughter while he prays for disaster
    The other gets paid for his bad work, destruction of strong binds
    There’s nothing quite as deadly for those in love as a long time
    I was stuck in the wrong mind; punched this fuck in his jaw line
    In an effort to stall time I hugged something once called mine
    Firing Squad!
    “Machine of the racist, blew our teeth through our faces
    ‘cause love is something better kept beneath all the pages.”



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    Last edited by Steven William; August 5th, 2009 at 03:22 AM
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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    this is fuckin tight

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    Great piece dude

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    your lyrics and flow blends perfect with the right beat man this would make a great song
    you already know your shit is on point not any flaws with this its somthin i would listin smokin a L in a cool breeze leave me some feedback peace




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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    straight Darkside. dis shit wuz touching doe. keep writin.

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    First off I want to say this, those people above really need to read how to give proper feedback...With that being said.

    I think this piece has a lot of emotional content, that was executed extremely well.
    The vocabulary was very descriptive which held this piece together, loved the fact you threw multies in there, you've got a certain "finesce" the way you use them.
    The flow/Style of writing was defenetly impressive, I can see that you've drastically stepped your game up for writing this piece. In my opinion, this OM here, is quality in which some have barely seemed to touch these past few months. So this is why I'm going to nominate this piece for the OM HOF.
    Top notch writing such as this deserves recognition and you my friend do deserve this.

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    yo this was pretty dope........great flow.....the vocab in this was coo....like the rhyme scheme......overall was a good drop man


    We couldn’t read or write, just slaves to the books
    And a bastard of a master; we gave and he took
    He slays when we look – to teach ourselves anything
    Toward self bettering or knowledge to spell, lettering
    So tell me, who’s the better king – the slave or the master
    One digs the grave to his laughter while he prays for disaster
    The other gets paid for his bad work, destruction of strong binds
    There’s nothing quite as deadly for those in love as a long time

    shit was dope here^^
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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    not bad, the flow, and multies were dope. you could up the vocab,in some bars and get more wordplays and metas, ect.

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    good to see and old face in OM,

    nice piece man... still good with the story tellin'
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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    Beautiful man I love it alot. It has a very good impact to it you have some talent. I really like the second verse really hits hard.

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    thats good shyt bruh...u picked a great concept not too many pplz touch on and wrote a great story to it...ur flow was great...ur multiz were everywhere n went with ever line...tha wording was great n i cud rele feel all tha emotion u went into writing this piece...metaphorez n refz were very clear n they hit hard just like every line did...n finally u ended it wonderfully...i mean those last few lines made this piece rele...they were very inspirational...KEEP WRITING THAT GOOD SHYT!!!

    my fav lines are

    We couldn’t read or write, just slaves to the books
    And a bastard of a master; we gave and he took
    He slays when we look – to teach ourselves anything
    Toward self bettering or knowledge to spell, lettering
    So tell me, who’s the better king – the slave or the master
    One digs the grave to his laughter while he prays for disaster
    The other gets paid for his bad work, destruction of strong binds
    There’s nothing quite as deadly for those in love as a long time
    I was stuck in the wrong mind; punched this fuck in his jaw line
    In an effort to stall time I hugged something once called mine
    Firing Squad!
    “Machine of the racist, blew our teeth through our faces
    ‘cause love is something better kept beneath all the pages.”

    rele tha whole last verse was very well written...

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    wow

    I was caught up in this from the first 3 lines, that's crazy. Can tell you a true lyricist. Loved how you used your words, didn't overpower the verse with unnecessary words like some kats. Properly use your word usage, that's wassup. Cause lately I been readin alot of shit that makes me think "This mofo so smart they stupid" cause they just put in big words randomly with no particular purpose but to prove they know some dictionary, dig? This shit was hot though

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    nice man. like the wordplay and how you described everything

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    Re: Slaves to the Books

    Thank you. For making something worth reading in this forum. God... I feel so justified in hating this forum and wanting it deleted until I read something like this. Great piece. Something different from the classic I'm so sad I want to kill myself drop. It was well thought out, emotional, and written very well. I enjoyed it.

    Two thumbs up.



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