Simply amazing...Great storey telling every line was on topic and the emotion was purely astounding, I personally like the theme the point of saying no matter how damaged or hurt she looks, eternally she is beautiful, quite..."Romantic" Idk if this was a true story or just a random "Come to mind" poem but alas, either way, Simply perfect.
Ohh uhm when i goto the skate park tomorrow ill write another poem and hopefully drop another poem. Keep on writing peace out!
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emotional.. definitely emotional. i wasn't expecting the ending at all and i think thats what made me like the poem the most. it was a good read. definitely. but watch out for errors.. there were a few in grammar/spelling/punctuation. using the right devices can also make an okay poem a brilliant one. the imagery was nice. you described everything in detail. maybe try adding a few metaphors that are not so easy to think of. and switch up your adjectives. but yea, i liked it man. you've a lot of potential.
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