12 lines due by midnight
CleverPunch
A. Karpis
12 lines due by midnight
checkin in
check, dropping soon.
im headin out 4 the night, heres my 12...
I drop the flames, we r not the same
Tryin to get ur foot in the door…..but its lock’d and chained
When I put u in the hostpital u wont feel lively
When u realize, its like that poker player, you’ll phil ivey
My lines go over ya head & their full of thunder
He tried to get with the program…….& couldn’t pull a number
Throwin jabs & upper-cuts, my punches r the fastest
I tried givin clever a gut-check, broke dude tried to cash it
Ya punches aint clever, never had a strong drop
This battle 4 u is like Marc Wahlberg in Shooter……a long shot
Every evil that enters I execute…..this is a breeze
^^^^^^ just wanted to show everyone i could beat u w/ ease
Lets Go..
You lack a few STEPS kid, like a chick with a GROSS-CROTCH\
The pattern's got no "numbers", in this game of HOP-SCOTCH\
This Karpis don't "count", cos CleverPunch is TOP-NOTCH\\
You'r rhymes ain't power, quite opposite of your initials\
Your punches are all sour, but one thing may be beneficial\
Quit challening people , your battles are all superficial\
they call me clever ... in-fact I am most-def the smartest
You can call yourself abstract, you're just a retarded artist\
You're a freak everyone knows it, tho I think know what caused this\\
Call me un-wise, I called your dad dip-shit\
he tried to bite me, now I'm full of lip-stick!\
ph..gee, I GUESS that explains why you such a mis-fit!\\
I drop the flames, we r not the same
Tryin to get ur foot in the door…..but its lock’d and chained
ok
When I put u in the hostpital u wont feel lively
When u realize, its like that poker player, you’ll phil ivey
ok
My lines go over ya head & their full of thunder
He tried to get with the program…….& couldn’t pull a number
ok
Throwin jabs & upper-cuts, my punches r the fastest
I tried givin clever a gut-check, broke dude tried to cash it
ok
Ya punches aint clever, never had a strong drop
This battle 4 u is like Marc Wahlberg in Shooter……a long shot
ok
Every evil that enters I execute…..this is a breeze
^^^^^^ just wanted to show everyone i could beat u w/ ease
nah
vs
You lack a few STEPS kid, like a chick with a GROSS-CROTCH\
The pattern's got no "numbers", in this game of HOP-SCOTCH\
This Karpis don't "count", cos CleverPunch is TOP-NOTCH\\
nah
You'r rhymes ain't power, quite opposite of your initials\
Your punches are all sour, but one thing may be beneficial\
Quit challening people , your battles are all superficial\
ok
they call me clever ... in-fact I am most-def the smartest
You can call yourself abstract, you're just a retarded artist\
You're a freak everyone knows it, tho I think know what caused this\\
nah
Call me un-wise, I called your dad dip-shit\
he tried to bite me, now I'm full of lip-stick!\
ph..gee, I GUESS that explains why you such a mis-fit!\\
nah
vote - A. Karpis
uppin.
When I put u in the hostpital u wont feel lively
When u realize, its like that poker player, you’ll phil ivey
vs.
Call me un-wise, I called your dad dip-shit\
he tried to bite me, now I'm full of lip-stick!\
ph..gee, I GUESS that explains why you such a mis-fit!
O/A - A. Karpis had better punches, and more structure. Just a word of advice to CleverPunch you got to stop streching your shit out so much
2-0 - A. Karpis
return favor please - R. Assassin vs. Know-P please!
what do you mean by stretching?Originally Posted by R. Assassin
Like you got three lines to a bar, just when I read it, it felt mad streched out. I used to do the same shit, I just think you haveta shorten your shit up instead of 3 lines and stop spacing everything out cause people lose track of the flow if you can feel what I'm saying... No hard feelings dude like I said I used to do that same shit
ok thanks for the feed
upping
keep the 2 line to a bar structure, that really fucked your verse clever, plus you was trying stuff that just doesn't work...like just because you put "numbers" in one line and "counting" in the next doesn't make it a punch...
Easy win for A. Karpis.
Now I am become death; destroyer of worlds.
vote karpis
karpis...you got the concepts...but you need to polish your
bars a bit more wording wise...some of them are a bit too short
in wording, which is unusual to say in FL where usually everyone
stretches their bars but in your case stuff like your very first line
was just a bit too short to get a good flow going....it would
really polish your punches off if you worded them for fl0w a
bit better instead of just throwing the set up fast as fuck
then the punch...
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karpis
I drop the flames, we r not the same
Tryin to get ur foot in the door…..but its lock’d and chained
nah
When I put u in the hostpital u wont feel lively
When u realize, its like that poker player, you’ll phil ivey
meh
My lines go over ya head & their full of thunder
He tried to get with the program…….& couldn’t pull a number
nah
Throwin jabs & upper-cuts, my punches r the fastest
I tried givin clever a gut-check, broke dude tried to cash it
ok
Ya punches aint clever, never had a strong drop
This battle 4 u is like Marc Wahlberg in Shooter……a long shot
meh
Every evil that enters I execute…..this is a breeze
^^^^^^ just wanted to show everyone i could beat u w/ ease
nah
vs
You lack a few STEPS kid, like a chick with a GROSS-CROTCH\
The pattern's got no "numbers", in this game of HOP-SCOTCH\
This Karpis don't "count", cos CleverPunch is TOP-NOTCH\\
nah
You'r rhymes ain't power, quite opposite of your initials\
Your punches are all sour, but one thing may be beneficial\
Quit challening people , your battles are all superficial\
nah
they call me clever ... in-fact I am most-def the smartest
You can call yourself abstract, you're just a retarded artist\
You're a freak everyone knows it, tho I think know what caused this\\
nah
Call me un-wise, I called your dad dip-shit\
he tried to bite me, now I'm full of lip-stick!\
ph..gee, I GUESS that explains why you such a mis-fit!\\
nah
This battle was weak on both parts, Dude that wasn't Karpis, your structure was wierd and u threw no punches
V/Karpis
good battle.....thanks for the votes.....once i hit 50 ill check ur battles
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