User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 8 of 8

Thread: i lost my mind part 2

  1. #1
    PACO
    Guest

    i lost my mind part 2

    this is the second part to i lost my mind so give me feedback


    now you niggas are lookin at me like i lost control/
    i could never win or gain power like bob dole/
    all my life i've never been accepted i've always been rejected/
    i don't think once i've ever been respected/
    you already saw me explode you didn't like the results at the end/
    nigga i'm the real thing i ain't gotta pretend/
    there's nothin i could do about it/
    all you hatin niggas pushed me to end of my wits/
    i already told you once i'm sick of this shit/
    i'm similar to a cat i have nine lives/
    i've been stabbed several times with different knives/
    better think twice if you think i'm afraid of death/
    i'll be ready to go when it's my very last breath/
    you ain't thinkin straight comin around me not wearin a vest/
    no doubt without hesitation i'll put a bullet hole in ya chest/
    fuck you if you think i need help i ain't goin to a mental institute/
    before i go i'll randomly execute every prostitute/
    the truth comes out i'm a lunatic a freak show/
    and i ain't ashamed cus i'm a psycho/

    this was somethin i just came up with so give me feedback

    peace

  2. #2
    PACO
    Guest
    uppin

  3. #3
    PACO
    Guest
    don't be sleepin

  4. #4
    SmoKeyThaBear
    Guest
    i liked the flow, i dont think i read part one but im sure it was just as good

  5. #5
    PACO
    Guest
    thnx fo the feedback
    uppin

  6. #6
    PACO
    Guest
    quit sleepin

  7. #7
    Newbie ecentialcypha215's Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2003
    Location
    skilladelph
    Age
    41
    Posts
    15
    Battle Record
    0-1
    yo dawg i was readin ur shit and thinkin it be even tighter if u used triple rhymes to end your bars like when you said
    better think twice if you think im "afraid of death"
    instead of sayin just last breath put something that rhymes with "afraid of death" ya know what i mean !
    it was tight keep it up dawgy!
    one!
    all been through the same insane shit a chain of predicaments
    boys that bonded whiles ago but yo we been stickin since
    for instances even through all the fights and the differences
    we still remained as tight as a white knuckle fuckin fist can get! (me)

  8. #8
    PACO
    Guest
    thanx fo the feedback
    uppin

Similar Threads

  1. Lost in my mind..
    By *J.R.* in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: January 9th, 2011, 08:57 PM
  2. Part of My Mind
    By rhymebad in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 9
    Last Post: January 24th, 2010, 01:13 AM
  3. If your chick lost a body part...would u stay?
    By Dre Mack Musick in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 30
    Last Post: October 23rd, 2009, 03:36 AM
  4. i lost my mind part 3
    By PACO in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: April 23rd, 2003, 10:53 AM
  5. lost mind
    By fithycalibur in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: February 23rd, 2003, 01:47 AM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •