everyone round here treat me like a living saint
But why does your sig look like u made it with microsoft paint?
- ok, but weakish
I bet that's not even you in it, talkin bout the ugly dude
yall both have something in common,I don't care that Im rude
- No. That was a very sloppy finish to what could have been ok
this kid can't see my rhymes so I'll give him some opticals
shit, with verse like his, I'll call winning impossible
- meh.
stylin? Yeah right dude you need to keep tryin
and you rap sloppy, like your in a hospital bed dyin
- nah
I stylin* this kids face like I'm some kinda poperazzi
you stay losin your rap battles like you some kinda rap Nazi
-nah
dead proof thinks he is immortal i will prove you cannot avoid death,
will you just stop spittin rhymes am gettin choked by your breath,
-nah
my drop is ruthless, no time to recover, you want to retreat,
i have to admit your rapping is incomplete, dont make me repeat,
- Nope. sloppy ending
you copying artists your a cheat, to this site your a disgrace,
so go grab you suit case and fuck off with your white face,
-not a punch
before i smash you into a fire place, blood dripping from chest,
ive proved to every one your a worthless fuck up possessed ,
-nope
this shit that am spilling is like a ghost really very chilling,
messy but extremely cold but av just made a real killing
- noooooooo
Deadproof, i see some improvement, keep working on it. Your beginning to get punches but c'mon man!!! You can be more offensive than that! More creativity, wit etc. Calling someone a rap nazi is not a punch. But yeah, your getting there bro. Keep going and you'll be ok
Stylin' you don't really throw any punches. You make lots of statements... and they don't hurt. What you say, needs to hurt. More wit, misdirection needed.
Stay up both of u.
V/Deadproof
