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    Thumbs up The Waiting Room

    Track off an album I'm working on titled Dr. Stick E. Greene. Going w/ a hospital theme this will probably be one of the lead off songs. Feedback appreciated

    Why hello, I didn't see you there
    Welcome to our facilities as you can see they are very spacious and-
    *PAGING DR. GREENE*
    *EMERGENCY DR. GREENE TO OR ROOM 12*
    So sorry I have to run, please take a seat here and I'll be with you shortly!
    *DR. GREENE REPORT TO ROOM 12 IMMEDIATELY*
    Please sir, have a seat in the waiting room...



    Dr. Stick Greene, Medical Surgeon
    Loss of blood vital signs this is urgent
    Into room 12 (GO!) lets be quick
    You're about to be saved by the magic that is Stick
    Let me first say I'm sorry to inconvenience
    I'm gettin inside your skin like intravenous
    Explore the depths of your innermost working
    Find what hides inside your mind lurking
    Dig the dirt down expose what lies hidden
    Try as you might theres nothing thats forbidden
    You try to fight it the moment I recite it
    Hold your tongue still for real you might bite it
    Feel sick still just know that sticks real
    The mad doctor's prescribing six pills
    Of that shit that fiends beg just for one hit
    But I ain't fooled quick I'm just too legit

    -
    Too long. Too long, we waste our lives
    Move on. Move on, before your day arrives
    We sit. We stare. We inch towards our doom
    Feel sick. We care, here in the waiting room
    We call. Your name. come and release your pain
    Insane. restrain. I'm surging through your vein
    We sit. We stare. still moving towards the tomb
    I'm sick. Despair. here in my waiting room
    -
    Got my mind on my money and my money come on time
    You sick now you'll get iller with each line
    The doctor is in and i'm on fire with the pen
    Shocked back to life to be murdered again
    I'll admit I'm somewhat of a cruel surgeon
    Never get fucked I'm somewhat of a cool virgin
    Got you split open up on my operating table
    I'mma start up your heart up a with a live power cable
    This ain't fable i ain't lying when i'm spittin truth
    I'm at the crib droppin bombs in the killin booth
    The doctor so pay attention to my wordspan
    My flow-reactic magic leave you locked inside a hearse man
    A cursed clan, we the worst Murdersota disciples
    The verse stands, and know that we shoulderin rifles
    The angel of death, i am the light and the darkness
    The east and the west, I am the crossroads of hard shit
    -
    Too long. Too long we waste our lives
    Move on. Move on, before your day arrives
    We sit. We stare. We inch towards our doom
    Feel sick. We care, here in the waiting room
    We call. Your name. come and release your pain
    Insane. restrain. I'm surging through your vein
    We sit. We stare. still moving towards the tomb
    I'm sick. Despair. here in my waiting room
    -
    I'm so hellish the devil is my accomplice
    So anything my mind can derive I can accomplish
    Yeah Stickface, I graduated with honors
    Got my M.D. (you fuck wit me?) you's a goner
    The main guy I look fly in my white coat
    Who wanna die catch a knife in your nice throat
    You wanna step wanna rep yo come be a martyr
    I'm a diamond in the rough there ain't no one harder
    I'm holding water leading you cattle into the slaughter
    Guard my rhymes the way Eminem protects his daughter
    Spit words to the wise i'm disturbing the lies
    Sicker than cancer I'll answer the cries
    And now your time is coming, your name is being called
    Call me chemo cause my therapy gon leave ya bald
    Raise up on you how i keep my hand steady
    It's over, you're through now, (The Doctor is Ready)
    -
    Too long. Too long we waste our lives
    Move on. Move on, before your day arrives
    We sit. We stare. We inch towards our doom
    Feel sick. We care, here in the waiting room
    We call. Your name. come and release your pain
    Insane. restrain. I'm surging through your vein
    We sit. We stare. still moving towards the tomb
    I'm sick. Despair. here in my waiting room
    -

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    Re: The Waiting Room

    Pretty good work here.. The flow was pretty constant, you had some good multies, nice concept. This would be cool to hear as an audio.

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    Re: The Waiting Room

    It was cool good job I like the last verse but the whole set was sweet good job man. Young Squad
    MR. WEST BIOTCH

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    Re: The Waiting Room

    Thanks for the feed, anyone else got anything to say?

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    Re: The Waiting Room

    Uppin this

    Come on no one has feedback? I put some time into writing this piece and people are getting more feeds with lame trapping freestyles!

    Come on tell me what you think!

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