im new n wanting to get a battle in.
ChuckM
the shooter
im new n wanting to get a battle in.
well way to volunteer me there buddy
but i'm never one to disappoint...
so i'll drop in an hour or 2
after i get the fucking shower i was supposed to get but then i'm in battles without knowing it dammit.
:vanja:
oppps, well i saw you name on every other thread so figured why not. 24 hour time limit to drop. you can set the other rules
10 lines
that's it really
:vanja:
really? didn't even ask me to battle, man damn newbie, fuck him
little fucker is a no weight, so he'd throw his back out tryna Chuck M
yeah i'm first to beat him, and i'm presently winless so that'll hurt his future
he's playing himself if he think he can win so this is a First Person Shooter
you can't measure up to the ruler, so i take it your shit's outta proportion
i'll kill him before his account is even 5 weeks old, call this an abortion
this newbie challenging me is puzzling, assemble ya wig
i don't need punches to win, this battle resembles my sig
yeah this kid ain't for real, he's faker than cubic zirconia
he couldn't spit sick if he drank then vomitted ammonia(pneumonia)
:vanja:
dude your interest you say is wasting wackos/
your sure winless and must be blazing crack hoe/
we can do this here, the street or in the ghetto/
ill eat dude then beat you with your medal/
no tim allen boy, but its tool time/
pull my dual nines put em through this fools spine/
youll find i must have a ghoulish cruel mind/
your a wrestler, you must like to jerk n pull guys/
but if you have a chick,ill grab her quick, n smash her son/
befriend n dick her, let me bend then twist her, then thrash her tounge/
vote up please
bump
you can't measure up to the ruler, so i take it your shit's outta proportion
i'll kill him before his account is even 5 weeks old, call this an abortion
Vs
Good flow and multi's
But this is a battle Shooter you dropped a good verse but it wasnt a battle verse it didnt have a punchy style and you let yourself get dissed. ChuckM decent overall verse but that line was the killer for me good shit. If shooter could work good punchs into his style he would have a pile of victims in no time peace.
V/ChuckM
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Originally Posted by HYPOKRIT
i appreciate the vote. out of pure curiosty, what is the punchy style i was lacking, i thought it was fairly personal with stuff from his profile and all but apparently not enough. i would really appreciate the criticisim.
opener:chuk
personals: both
punches: shooter
multis: none
enjoyment: none
flow: tie
closer: chuck
vote:chuck
over all close battle but chuck came harder to me
up...haha shooter is mad ill we should collab definitely "bro"
:vanja:
yo shooter.. u ever went to goldmic.com ??
ink dont fuckin freepost on battle threads ... ask that shit in PM
this aint your personal fuckin chat forum, bitch....
shooter you got some nice little wordplays, but the trouble is your too simple for text rap... theres too many people with brains competing here for simplistic raps to win... no hate , just being honest... youll have to try to increase your syllables, come up with more clever punchlines, and learn to use more witty wordplays
chuck you have an alarming tendency to get too corny with your wordplay, but really youre elevating quite nicely... i like the cadence of your raps.. actually know a guy who raps that style where the cadence gets slower towards the end of each line... has a tendency to sound kinda goofy in audio, like the dude raps too slow, because all the emphasis goes to the end of each phrase... something you might want to work on is experimenting with flipping the cadence of your lines so that it stays in good rhythm, but yet comes out more complex
V/chuck
you rap like ibeastout votes
no i havent, why do u ask.
uppin for the last vote
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