Roses Are Dead

[Nahlidge]

I tried to look for you among hearts broken and shattered
Wishing I knew from the start that you were spoken for, laughter
Isn`t as beautiful as it sounds when all I hear is tears
And all I`ve seen is pain, that`s why I fear to steer
Down your one way street, where the answer`s clear
But listening to your heart beat, I could dance for years
And not do the same step twice, variety is the spice
That seasons life into bad, ugly and everything nice
These silhouette dreams never seem to help me take flight
So sorry for crashing into you, I wasn`t watching your brake lights
And sorry my insurance can`t afford you a rental
Instead I have this passenger seat that would perfectly fit you
Honestly I don`t think this collision is that big of an issue
Everything happens for a reason, there was no reason to miss you
And swerve off the beaten path, so I`m sorry that I`m not sorry
And I don`t have no where to go, but here`s my number, just call me
So I can act like a busy person and play hard to get
Then months down the line I can pretend that it`s not just sex
That I want you for, but more for your heart and your mind
There`s plenty fish in the sea, you just got caught on my line
And I reeled you in, but it`s real you`re in, I`m not fake hearted
So when I win, I go out on a limb ready to take losses
Wanting a piece of the bigger pie, but I can`t break off it
We`re past walking on clouds, you got me in outer space - starships
Are hardest to fly when I`m not trying to control you
I`m just trying to meet you in the middle and then get to know you
Before this, I spent hours trying to decide how to approach you
And the best thing I could think of is this poem that I wrote you

Roses are Dead, Violets are too, so are the Daffodils
But I`d go look, forever if it took, cause if you ask I will
And if I can`t find, your flower in time, I`ll try something else
Like you and me, planting a seed, and birthing a flower ourselves

[Nahlidge]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...576/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...648/index.html

[Baron Mynd]

I read / responded / voted on this over in the RHYME league against Pain last week. I really liked some of the extended metaphors you carried over. Kinda short, but it was enough to win.

Keep 'em comin' fam...


- Deus

[MADDNES53]

roses are dead, violets are too...
this had a love/hate thing going on.
funny line - There`s plenty fish in the sea, you just got caught on my line
your metaphors are on point.
this is very well written.

**my first post**
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...718/index.html

[STrE3T KID]

work on yo vocab

yo metaphors is not to bad FAM
keep it up

[Nahlidge]

lol @ "work on ya vocab". *sighs*

[Jove]

you say "lol @ work on vocab" like your vocab is so profound. its not, dude. you could use work on your vocab. truly you could use work on everything, you aint perfect in no aspect. the last bars were dope, but seemed to end abruptly each line. from the issue line to the call me line seemed played. good metas n decent multies, keep it up.

[Ink Poyzin]

^ you talking like it's suppose to me somethin? (stfu) have you listened to your fuckin' soundclick shit yet, and hear yourself? you suck, and your vocab weak as fuck...

anyhow, nahlidge, good drop and the piece was solid. sucks to see so many people postin' bs and talking like hip-hop is actually based on vocab anyway-- gd geeks. alot of people try pulling peices like this off, but come off rather boring when trying to pursue it. but you, you executed this rather nicely. loved your usage of metaphors and the way you stayed consistant with the flow, i think this would be dope over a beat. yea, as said before, it's short, but then again it only looks like one verse to me.. the hook was dope.. thanks for the read, man, appreciate you sharing this piece with us.

and jove, u got shit to say? make a decent track and then MAYBE we can battle, gd clown..

[noncentz]

god dam nahlidge its been a long time i still got are old collabs i think never the less u always had skill but you only upgrading im impressed im happy you didnt compensate skillz with time like alot of catd o i liked the read want to collab again no doubt.....stay doing what you do papa

[Rosetti Frost]

nice shit....

no need to work on the vocab.......

like dude said your metas are nice.....

overall I liked this piece....I've read other stuff from you......

your a talented writer so keep it up.......

very poetic....some straight forward ideas......

[Daz]

upping this for you. too much fucking wackness in OM.

[A.Photix]

Very well writen as said above, Feels original and the piece itself had soul to it.
Was a good read. Thanks for the opertunity.

[Nahlidge]

Thanks for the feed. And this is the last time I address the "up your vocab" comments from people. VOCAB AIN`T SHIT.... I`ll repeat that for you in case I the simple vocabulary didn`t register... VOCAB AIN`T SHIT. It seems like every noob writer thinks it does lol. This isn`t a type of piece where you need better "vocab". Anybody can write a piece and use big words cuz the think it`ll impress people. I`m sorry. But rappin` like you`re Einstein tryna give a lecture is wack. I rather come into Open Mic and read a piece that sounds like Lil Boosie wrote it with dope flow than read sumthin` that sounds like you took random words out of a dictionary and tried fittin` them into a verse. I can see if I wrote a piece about atoms and a periodic table. Then yea. But not in this type of piece lol. You wack sauce ass niggas. Besides the fact that I could write a verse in 10-15 minutes usin` a 2nd grader`s vocabulary and shit on you is the reason I laugh at "up your vocab" comments. I`m done. Now you can pursue with your wack shit. lulz.

[Big Question]

word....vocab isnt clever per say, it has to be used correctly..sick multies are the way to go, you dropped a few of those, good shit nahlidge. i have to laugh at noobs handing out this type of advice. Infact keeping it simple often produces the best work...

[Nahlidge]

word....vocab isnt clever per say, it has to be used correctly..sick multies are the way to go, you dropped a few of those, good shit nahlidge. i have to laugh at noobs handing out this type of advice. Infact keeping it simple often produces the best work...

A man of my own heart.