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Thread: fcukme Vs. Vallus

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    Gully Vallus's Avatar
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    fcukme Vs. Vallus

    10-20 lines
    Due in an hour or so

    Topic is best sex with a hooker ever

    G'Luck....

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    check

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    1,2 1,2

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    Partaking in all the pleasures
    Humans always do endeavor
    To experience one or another
    My personal favourite? An amazing lover
    So why go amateur? I’m a professional
    Work for the bank and my salary exceptional
    With the money I got I spent it wisely
    My wrong decisions only came nightly..

    I remember her now still , 22 years ago, July 1987
    Trudie Vee, met her on the streets, who knew she could take me to heaven
    Sellin her body at a fair price, she made me look twice
    Red hair cascading looking oh so hot
    Her green eyes and red mouth in a pout
    Her body was slammin to say the fuckin least
    I took one look at her and my body wanted to feast
    Her ass pert and luscious, her tits looked so fucking precious
    I wanted her right then and there, I know the impression she cared
    To show was exactly this, and in that knowing moment I gave her a kiss
    She cocked her eyebrow and my cock wanted in
    I knew my fun night was about to begin
    Paid her 10, she gave me a look, as if she knew I wasn’t a crook
    Well a crook I wasn’t and I told her,
    “plenty more where that came from, this folder
    of cash, baby girl, as long as you do me right,
    and I’ll pay you a lump sum at the end of the night”

    back in my hotel room my cock dying to be free
    she came out of the bathroom and showed herself to me
    in sexy black lingerie with crotchless panties
    if she weren’t a whore shed be the worlds best tease
    I grabbed her arms and pinned her on the bed
    And by her moans I knew she was likin what I did
    Mounting myself on her sexy ass, I humped it in a way that did not suggest class
    I let myself in on her sweet pussy slit, couldn’t help myself, the girl was fucking mint

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    nice drop^


    enjoi....


    I used to know this stripper, named fcukme, she was charmin man
    I would hit it from the back n her ass would clap like a marchin band
    So much great sex with her, I lost my job, it set me hard
    furniture set, laptop, brand new car later maxed my credit cards
    Her lips were like a potion of love, when she'd blow a kiss
    her head felt like she was suckin my soul out thru my scrotums tip
    I spent more time with her pearl than a jeweler man,
    and I killed people just for tryin to smooch her hand
    This little indian goddess used to charge $5 for lapdances and a feelin
    But sex with her was priceless, worth forsaking my family and children
    Fuck a bugatti, mansion, and lambo with peanut butter seats
    I'd trade every bit of that to have that girl back between my sheets
    She's a real hooker cuz her hooks so far in me it's crazy, better
    believe for 15 minutes with that ass I'd stick my face thru a paper shredder
    Her tits so nice I usually cum before I reach my belt,
    but somehow she wakes him back up with a single fingernail
    I love this hooker so much, that she got me fiendin for the top
    Kinda way fiends on the block need a rock n end up theivin on the lots
    I'm so pussywhipped I've got lash marks on my back and butt
    If she told me to kill myself to hit it.....I'd ask her for the gun

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    i liked yours too lol
    quite descriptive

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    OMG... a love connection... unbelievable... i couldnt read this verse... all i could stand to do was skim over it, but that was enough... get a room you two.....roflmao
    you rap like ibeastout votes

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    Uh Hello?
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^6

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    i liked both pieces, both had some cool imagery and . i think tht fcukme coulod be good with some practice but this piece was once again just a bit too simple, the lines really were coo but just hardly any creativity.......once again a deep story just not really creative. val had a bit better of a piece, obviously seemed pretty good.


    v/ vallus

    hit my battle with arch

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    This is getting slept on and it wasn't even THAT bad...

    Imagery: Tie
    Vocab: fcukme
    Creativity: Vallus
    Structure: Vallus
    Multies: Vallus


    Comments: Some x-rated shit up in here, someone needs to slap an 18+ sign on that title, for real... Both had great imagery, very descriptive.. fuckme you need to work on your structure like the opening was decent but it had no real end, it didn't feel like the story ended, just cut off as opposed to Vallus who had a simple but more clear cut ending... Vallus gets my vote for being more creative...

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    ..Distinct Advantage..

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    Re: fcukme Vs. Vallus

    Closed
    RB OG Triple OG

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