haven't posted in a while; new poem:

[fastforwords]

green. >>

I sit and study it
stuttering, cant speak
just fumble it
mumble it
cant quite pronounce it
- Denounce it?
I doubt it, more useful
for medicine and releif
just legalize and tax it
smoke and relax
Hit.
Now 1, 2, 3
breathe.
So sit and study it
stuttering, cant speak
just fumble it
mumble it…


links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ly-399939.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...go-399867.html

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[Alphaeus]

I liked this, you've a style that I find intresting.
I'm all for poety with a rhyme scheme and I just felt at ease with the structure of your writing. I liked the repatition from begging to end, and I felt the piece was not overdone and you where right to keep the piece short, a nice read.

[Spekz.]

For being incredibly short, repetitive, and about weed.

This read really nice. Obviously it ignored catagories such as emotion, wordplay etc...basically everything lol

it was about as simplistic as you can get...with still having a sense of coolness and tight shit to it. Kind of odd, but nice none the less.


hit my shit and enjoyyyyy!

[fastforwords]

thanks for the comments guys. this was scribbled while i was smoking a joint last night - it took me as long to write as it took me to get a good buzz on. i didn't really care for much content it was an observational piece that i wanted to like the smoke from my lungs. its not profound, its dope. thanks, again. >>

[Soul Slayer]

Smoke it... roll it... eat it....

I like the short piece man.... It was easy to follow but i'd like to see more of a captivating piece to familarise myself with your work my dude. Other than that this piece was good. Not detailed as i like them but surprisingly enough i liked it.

[Damian Gray]

A quirky little poem here, it's about weed but it's all good, a poem can be focused on anything. I liked the imagery you where able to incorperate into the poem.
The poem was a set pace and was on point from start to finish.

[Soul Slayer]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...pe-401058.html

[Spoken]

interesting kevin....
nice to see you stopped by and for what its worth this was fuckin humor and real. yeah i enjoyed it.... but know you can kill this topic easily if thought was put and effort but word nice little spoken feeling