Travis Is Dead! (Halfway House)

[Soule]

Travis Is Dead!
Soule', Scientific and Cry



These few seconds were so quick, and my soul slipped
through Jesus' fingers like "oh shit!" before my throat split.

The sun rise was one time in my life that I felt happy,
her eyes met mine, I fell out of bed and we kept laughing.
Our three year checkpoint, the best choice ever made,
because today, I talk to KAY about a better day.
I'll never trade this life for another, hope my mother's proud,
I drove around town and heard her cry underground.
I know my dad's not, he always had thoughts and suspicion,
he saw her in a car lot, with another man, but I can't listen.

Goodbye Dad.

Too much pain, i dropped bars in my brief stint in varsity
like a shooting star, my life flashed in high velocity.
How could Felicity stab me in my open heart so rapidly
ditching our plan to rise, killin’ the seed bastardly.
"I guess arrogance is bliss unless it hits close to home
its the norm but I’m split at ends my body feels like a battle dome".
It never rains but pours like the whisky in my wasted eyes
i never thought the day would come, when i would cry.
I wanna die, this girl killed my child, she says we must depart
The walls laugh at me, swelling closer and I'm torn apart.

Bye, bye baby!

doomed to what you start! this game of cat and mouse..
of man and clown, but I can't shave this pain and smash it down,
so today, I'm lashing out... crashing now that you told me
that we had a baby coming and then you let it go "free",
'cause I didn't know, see... maybe I wouldn't have wanted this?
maybe it would have looked like you and I would've flaunted it,
this one honest kid, who could've been the ticket to make me honest,
man, my dad has a gun… maybe it'll make me wanted..
and I can break free on this, just like my non-existent baby,
now I'm in dad's den, and suddenly on a mission; crazy!
putting this on omission, making the best of my days
screaming at a gun with "no bullets" putting a rest to my ways.

Farewell Sara, so-long life.

Travis is dead, and my wishes are left with this urn,
I miss my friend, maybe the end came before his turn.

[Soule]

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[Soul Slayer]

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[Soule]

Up.

[Soul Slayer]

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[+h3_B|@ck_+enchu]

yea.....shit was deep....felt like i was readin out of his personal journal....

These few seconds were so quick, and my soul slipped
through Jesus' fingers like "oh shit!" before my throat split.

tight lines, lol @ through jesus' fingers like "oh shit"...kudos to whoever wrote dat

well put together story....could visualize every line for the most part....reminds me of Eminem's "Stan".....

and I can break free on this, just like my non-existent baby,
now I'm in dad's den, and suddenly on a mission; crazy!

The sun rise was one time in my life that I felt happy,
her eyes met mine, I fell out of bed and we kept laughing.
Our three year checkpoint, the best choice ever made,
because today, I talk to KAY about a better day.

"I guess arrogance is bliss unless it hits close to home
its the norm but I’m split at ends my body feels like a battle dome".
It never rains but pours like the whisky in my wasted eyes
i never thought the day would come, when i would cry.


them was some other nice quotables form this piece


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[Soule]

Thank you kind sir.

[Cody Nash]

word, bump.

[HYPOKRIT]

The first verse had a few average multi's and ok flow. It wastn a horrible read but it didnt seem at all related to this travis the unborn baby. Im assuming thats what this was all about some baby that some bitch killed but i dont really see why you would all name your babies travis .... confusing

Anyway the second verse stayed on topic well and had a fairly decent impact on me as the reader. Unfortunatly the rhymes were very weak no multi's that i can see. In most cases the rhymes were single syllable.

Last verse was easily the best good multi's and stayed on topic and got the message across well. I felt the neding wasnt as good as the start which was a bit of a let down but still good shit.

[Soule]

Well, seeing as the concept was mine.. that first verse had EVERYTHING to do with the concept. And you misunderstood the concept sir... nice try though.