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    Check Up

    Ok so I watched the nuggets mavericks game and wrote this in 5 minutes just for fun

    On the court D in my face, i aint scared cause no one can stick me
    I'm got grace on the court my moves are so shifty
    A deliberate pace when i move, dont pick my spots i let them pick me
    Cross u over in a blaze its so wicked it even trick me
    And i could dunk it vicous but a layup that much smoother
    I might just dunk on a break, i'll fingerroll that much sooner
    Left or right u call it ambidexterity, in the hood we call it even handed
    Play me u gone need therapy, block ya shot and get the rebound w/o even landing
    And my favorite player kobe so u already know what up
    I liek to dribble between my legs a fews time before i pull up
    I tried to tell you I'm tricky my moves will make u tilt
    My jumper wet like panties, they booth smoother than silk
    School u like u my pet, u a looser should of drunk yo milk
    And dont let me get hot i'm already warm as a quilt
    Cause i'll rain so many 3's yo hair will get frizzy,
    Fundamental pump fake and jab step shake u without even dribbling
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    Re: Check Up

    good shit on this piece. I'm not amazing at basketball, but me n my dudes are known to be ballin it up whenever you call us. either that or we're spittin or cheefin some buddha. I like that you touched on somethin like this, a lil different you know? You could work on the flow though man. It wasn't too good. You definitely got potential man, you know what to do on some real shit, just keep at it. Try to make each line have the same or a similar amount of syllables.

    On some real shit though, you had some spelling mistakes. I mean if you gotta, just run it through Word and spell check it right quick. Good shit though bro, keep writin

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    Re: Check Up

    not too bad mayn...imma drop my DRUG SPORTS GAME like next week or something...good flow...good conceptz...good use of vocab (terminology)....pretty good metaphorz n shyt...my fav lines are...

    And i could dunk it vicous but a layup that much smoother
    I might just dunk on a break, i'll fingerroll that much sooner
    Left or right u call it ambidexterity, in the hood we call it even handed
    Play me u gone need therapy, block ya shot and get the rebound w/o even landing

    lol i know what ur talkin bout thats some hood shyt right there...many metaphorz...dam i counted bout 6 or 7...KEEP ON WRITING THAT HOOD SHYT!!!

    yo RTF on any of my shyt...
    I cannot list all of my best lines inside this signature
    because they number in the tens of thousands.


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