Still think I'm just rhyming?

[Kazper™]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-394970.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...tz-394944.html

You SLOW-BITCH;; I suppose you think your flows "SO-SICK" /
but Next to "ME-YO", your "Unnoticed like the Pun"..................... OH-SHIT //

HOLD-THIS... Just for you to understand I had to QUOTE-IT /
So lets take it back to where we started... Your a SLOW-BITCH //

Maybe I'm played? My style's out of date like a "LOCK-CORRODED" /
I Use Capitals and Quotations but now in <b>Drops-We-Bold-Shit</b> //

But I Hate Change... So thats probably why the Flow-Gets ... /
.. So-Streched with multie's that my raps become a Joke-Skit. //

Cheque it.
I must be God. I part sea's like I'm slashin' threw letters /
Stealin' your ¢ommon sen¢e... but the goverment does it better //<¢ents>

Bars are passed your intelligence like a smaller version of you ... /
.. living in the present;; 'Cause rhyming's a class in nursery school //

Matter of fact... fact is matter;; An if You madder of fact /
The mad ha/t/ters lackin' Tea like the aftermath of that without the slash //
<The Mad Haters>

An after that, I've "batterd w/rap" Like it was "food-for-thought" /
Y'all, I Was Actin' Wack. Your on the same shit that I use-to-drop //

[BabbaBcool]

'Cause rhyming's a class in nursery school //

Favorite line along with the last one. At times I felt like to structure was a little forced but as it went on it felt like the piece really came into it's own. Like the play on words and structure at the end a lot. Overall a good drop.

Check my piece, Keep My Head Up on the first page of O.M.

[Chrit.]

This sucked.

[Ink Poyzin]

i didnt like the flow too much..
and at first the 2 bars was like an approach to start dissing somebody. then in the 3rd and 4th bar it was like you dissed yourself. then the last bars they were like about you and so on..
so like raided houses, it needs a little cleaning up.... if it was a diss in some sort of way, you gotta work harder to make your enemy feel like shit.

[Kazper™]

wow yall missing the concept compleatly... lol... wich is exactly what i cant stand about OM. It's not a diss, its not self glory or tareing myself apart it's just strait up word play for you to think about....... Everything in it was compleatly intended... wow.

thanx for the feed for the most part lol.

As for bartender, go buy yourself a better fucking mic your shit doesn't even have a pop filter you fake ass rapper lol

[Chrit.]

As for bartender, go buy yourself a better fucking mic your shit doesn't even have a pop filter you fake ass rapper lol

wow.. you have to be a complete moron

[Flowaholic X]

Leave him alone Bar, just stop with the E-beef ya'll.

[The Genesis]

this was nice for some text shit. some decent multies, a few of the punches hit below the belt, but were still pretty creative nonetheless;

although they would only work in a text piece with the bold line punch and talking about stretching your lines, which is all good, I understand this is an online forum so some cats just come on this bitch for fun and don't even really spit in real life. but if you actually rap off the net, ultimately a joint like this is completely useless, so it's like it doesn't even count, you know what I mean? if you actually rap offline just try working on shit in a more audio structured format or shit that would actually be relevant to spit in real life, then your arsenal of dope verses will build up and you'll have some raw shit to kick in a cipher or whatever instead of wasting time writing somethin that would only work online. but decent shit, stay at it.

[PIMA]

lmao

[Kazper™]

lmao

now this is what i want to hear, whether sarcastic or not lol. This was purely jokes, being creative with bars in text. nothing more nothing less... Damn why so serious? lol

Thanx for the feed even if some of yall gotta cut loose or sumthin' haha

[Kazper™]

wow.. you have to be a complete moron

*Takes note that you changed the song in your sig after the criticism*

[2SiQ]

THiS WAS KOO..
YOUR STRUCTURE iS A LiL SHAKY..
YOU KiNDA LOST ME iN THE MiDDLE.. ALL THE WAY TO THE END..
THE LAST 3 WORDS HELPED YOU..
THE 'USE TO DROP'

THE BEGiNNiNG WAS O.K.

MY FAVE LiNE WAS THE LOCK CORRODED
iN DROPS WE BOLD SHiT..


KEEP AT iT..

[country]

i thought first 6 bars was nice

the second half kinda sucked ass cuz the multi scheem went to shit after the first six


but fuck it


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[Chrit.]

*Takes note that you changed the song in your sig after the criticism*

The song in my sig hasnt changed in a month.

[Kazper™]

meh, what ev dude your lame. stick to what ever the fuck it is u do and stay off my shit. Mad Hatter, haha! Uppin' for the jokez