K9 vs BETTER THAN U

[k9kaynine]

10 lines, did yyou say 5hours?

[k9kaynine]

check

[BETTER THEN U]

yes drop time is 5 hours,10 lines and house rules........
check..........

[k9kaynine]

this dudes a gonna, if you thought you had a chance you never did/
he's like micheal j fox wit gloves on, you could never get a steady hit/

better than me? nah dawg, you've never even chased paper/
and the only time you got your hands on cheddar is usin a fuckin cheese grater/

i aint playin around homie i blast tecs/
i dont have to read any poems to know that this is your last breath/
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...last-breath-39

you wont want a re-match your dreadin this like rasta's/
im a natural athlete fuck a casket im dunkin him in baskets/

B is sittin back thinkin he dont needa drop dope to win/
cause he'll walk in wit an alias and drop votes wit him//

it is true too bad i will not tell you my alais

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[BETTER THEN U]

A gansta,a killer i'm not believing you in the least whore
Last i checked k-9 was just another name for police dog
So i know if anything happens you'll probally snitch
You still my 'dog'.....just the female version... you 'bitch'!!
You really can't diss because my 'bars' is just better music
And in prison you'd get a 'scar'ed'face' and 'screwed' kinda like Houston
This whole thing is foolish because your not close to my level
Little yellow bus going to school only time they ever told you,you special
F you and i dont think you know what your starting chump
Your dirty ass desert island is just Englands old garbage dump

[k9kaynine]

upp

[BETTER THEN U]

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[k9kaynine]

^^^^^^^^^^

[Led Poison]

[CENTER]
Before I Start Readin'... I Want Both of You To Know That I'm Givin' Ma Honest Opinion As An Artist When Votin'. That being' Said, Can You Each Return The Favor & Drop'a Honest Vote On My Battle:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ed-395147.html

Thanx In Advance!
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K9:
this dudes a gonna, if you thought you had a chance you never did/
he's like micheal j fox wit gloves on, you could never get a steady hit/
...Nice opener, flow'd smooth & it was also written well.


better than me? nah dawg, you've never even chased paper/
and the only time you got your hands on cheddar is usin a fuckin cheese grater/
...Funny personal/punchline, nt bad.


i aint playin around homie i blast tecs/
i dont have to read any poems to know that this is your last breath/
...An even better personal/punchline, but the 1st lines a filler, could've been worded better.


you wont want a re-match your dreadin this like rasta's/
im a natural athlete fuck a casket im dunkin him in baskets/
...lol, I liked this, also flowed tight.


B is sittin back thinkin he dont needa drop dope to win/
cause he'll walk in wit an alias and drop votes wit him//
...Damn, lol dope closer


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BTU:
A gansta,a killer i'm not believing you in the least whore
Last i checked k-9 was just another name for police dog
...lol, Sick opener, went in nice.


So i know if anything happens you'll probally snitch
You still my 'dog'.....just the female version... you 'bitch'!!
...Basic yes, but also ok for simple wordplay/personal.


You really can't diss because my 'bars' is just better music
And in prison you'd get a 'scar'ed'face' and 'screwed' kinda like Houston
...Decent wordplaypunchline, think u coudlve worded it better though.


This whole thing is foolish because your not close to my level
Little yellow bus going to school only time they ever told you,you special
...I liked the first bar but the 2nd couldve been worded alot better, not bad though.


F you and i dont think you know what your starting chump
Your dirty ass desert island is just Englands old garbage dump
...Koo' closer. flowed right, nice multies too.


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..::BREAK DOWN::..
Over All Structure: K9
PunchLines: K9
Personals: BTU
WordPlay: BTU
Flow: K9

[k9kaynine]

?????????

[Vince]

K-9-

this dudes a gonna, if you thought you had a chance you never did/
he's like micheal j fox wit gloves on, you could never get a steady hit/
Nah...
better than me? nah dawg, you've never even chased paper/
and the only time you got your hands on cheddar is usin a fuckin cheese grater/
Weak.
i aint playin around homie i blast tecs/
i dont have to read any poems to know that this is your last breath/
Weak personal.
you wont want a re-match your dreadin this like rasta's/
im a natural athlete fuck a casket im dunkin him in baskets/
What?.
B is sittin back thinkin he dont needa drop dope to win/
cause he'll walk in wit an alias and drop votes wit him//
O.k. closer/funny.


Vs.

BTU-


A gansta,a killer i'm not believing you in the least whore
Last i checked k-9 was just another name for police dog
Cool W/p.
So i know if anything happens you'll probally snitch
You still my 'dog'.....just the female version... you 'bitch'!!
Nah...
You really can't diss because my 'bars' is just better music
And in prison you'd get a 'scar'ed'face' and 'screwed' kinda like Houston
weak.
This whole thing is foolish because your not close to my level
Little yellow bus going to school only time they ever told you,you special
O.k.
F you and i dont think you know what your starting chump
Your dirty ass desert island is just Englands old garbage dump
What?.


V/ BTU was better than his opponent IMO.

[k9kaynine]

cheers for the vote man, uppin

[BETTER THEN U]

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[The Gangster]

K9

this dudes a gonna, if you thought you had a chance you never did/
he's like micheal j fox wit gloves on, you could never get a steady hit/
mm okish closer, weak..

better than me? nah dawg, you've never even chased paper/
and the only time you got your hands on cheddar is usin a fuckin cheese grater/
weakk

i aint playin around homie i blast tecs/
i dont have to read any poems to know that this is your last breath/
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...last-breath-39
mm mehish personal

you wont want a re-match your dreadin this like rasta's/
im a natural athlete fuck a casket im dunkin him in baskets/
better i surpose

B is sittin back thinkin he dont needa drop dope to win/
cause he'll walk in wit an alias and drop votes wit him//
ok closer

Overall kind of a weak verse here, try to hit harder punches, get a little more creative you know.. Also, sort out the structure, some people may like it this way bu i feel it's better without the //, we can tell when it's the end of the bar, and close up the gaps, just looks more neater..



BTU

A gansta,a killer i'm not believing you in the least whore
Last i checked k-9 was just another name for police dog
your point is? ..
So i know if anything happens you'll probally snitch
You still my 'dog'.....just the female version... you 'bitch'!!
nononoono
You really can't diss because my 'bars' is just better music
And in prison you'd get a 'scar'ed'face' and 'screwed' kinda like Houston
maybe it's how we pronounce it, but it don't ryhme to me.
This whole thing is foolish because your not close to my level
Little yellow bus going to school only time they ever told you,you special
ok
F you and i dont think you know what your starting chump
Your dirty ass desert island is just Englands old garbage dump
ok personal closer

Hmmm need alot of work but it's ok, you had ok concepts, just seemed your were lazy with them and rushed into them, could of made this better ver weak verse..


Punches: K9
Personals: K9
Multis: Tie..


Overall vote goes to K9 eventhough both were weak verses, BTU your first couple of bars just let you down..


RTF
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/poll...s&pollid=60948

[BETTER THEN U]

^why do you come in all my battles just to vote aganist me?.....you will certainly be blocked very soon you little homo.........