--The Throws of Passion--

[Dr.Manhattan]

In a moment of weakness, I caved to my desire--
And so, consumed by lust, I layed you by the fire--
Licking my lips, salivating, eyes wide and wild--
Mind no longer calculating, innocence inside defiled--
Such a beautiful soul, a rarity in existence--
Not convinced of my sincerity, you were scared of me and resisted--
But only for a moment, then your barriers were broken--
I already had your heart, it was barely yours to open--
Now the flames are raging hotter, the coals are glowing brightly--
And as your body yields to me, the pleasure grows inside me--
Your moans and gasps alert me that our climax is approaching--
The excitement slowly melts and the guilt it now encroaching--
But the certain satisfaction only passion can provide--
Comes to me in comfort, helps to calm my hands and mind--
Now dripping sweat I stand above your lifeless body bleeding--
"Bitch I told you that I'd kill you if I ever caught you cheating"--


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[Nite Owl]

Heh. Cool short piece here fella. The flow was real smooth and transitioned nicely. Short and to the point is always nice.

[Keeby Swaggz]

this is pretty dope for a short piece... didn't really see the twist comin', I thought it was just some sleazy romance for a second lol...

[Dr.Manhattan]

well thanks, not very much response but at least some people are looking at it, just no love for a conflicted superhero I guess--

[country]

my bad for sleepin on this


this was raw


i was expectin something stupid


but this was sick n on point

[country]

Now dripping sweat I stand above your lifeless body bleeding--
"Bitch I told you that I'd kill you if I ever caught you cheating"--


lmao yeah agin this was fuckin raw

[Fhienyx LaKaine]

This is a good verse intro middle the climax and the grand finale was summed up in the last bar. Dope. Thats something people didnt see coming at all.