...A Minute Of Realness...

[Esc0BosS]

You ever fall for something? Only to lose it all?
Lose the war and get left with a bruised up core?
I did… but I can promise I never ever chose to;
I never chose to ever distant whoever I was close to
And I could blame my child hood but why should I?
What? I fucked up; cuz moms never kissed me goodnight?
Cuz Pops was a bitch so I got hit, but not often with fists…
Ex bitches had me tripping, but stop getting it twisted…
True……………………….
That A lack of affection could neva pass as a blessing
And had me mad; acting depressive,
Always asking dumb questions only to pass on the message
That’s probly right now why I might be rappin aggressive
No back pack to school, I’d act a fool…
Pretend to attend but barely had a lesson
But how tha fuck can I blame the past…
…After my ass had attached with adolescence??
Truth is…………………….
Fuck fronting, I been dumbin and got stuck In my ways
Fucked with the wrong dame and got put in my place…
Moms talks another language, so I got nothing to say
Pops could never be blamed, at least not for me pushin my trust away
So now, I got my pride firmly tucked away…
Im out on the porch whenever it rains
I find it soothing, using its beauty to sever my pain
To whoever would ever expect me to pray, I say fuck you!!
God don’t exist, I whisper this while im puffing away
But suffer with gain…see, I’d say im slightly paranoid
Dismiss most bitches, at least the ones I know I can avoid
Proud…that’s these days my judgement doesn’t tend to fail me
But why should I live?...After we just handed death…to our baby…

Fuck

[Esc0BosS]

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[country]

this was fuckin NASTY

I did… but I can promise I never ever chose to;
I never chose to ever distant whoever I was close to


MAN u listenin to joey to much

for real this was on point

[Esc0BosS]

MAN u listenin to joey to much

^ lmao... yes i fuckin do lol uppin

[Esc0BosS]

smh @ the views and 1 feed?... uppin

[nineties flava]

This was dope... reminded me a lot of this song:

[youtube]4HNp0j5EWWY[/youtube]

in theme & how you chose to tell the story...

You already know the flow was on point so I'm just gonna critique how u told it. IMO some parts of it like the school shit was kinda cut off too early... u got a sense of it but then u didn't.

Other than that, this was a dope piece... 8.5/10

Stay up...

RTF on this:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...en-390849.html

[Esc0BosS]

smh... g/l/o 9z... uppin

[Esc0BosS]

cant get no feed on this bitch no more?? lol

[143]

i like this drop, how you started with base for the way this topic feel, then move to actions and consequences of it and now dealing with the aftermath. You got great movement in this piece too. Good vision, I can see all this happening.

Give it 9/10

like the other dude said there was a few lines that hit but you pulled back a little....

Crit on this

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...28&postcount=1

[DramaJones]

That A lack of affection could neva pass as a blessing
And had me mad; acting depressive,
Always asking dumb questions only to pass on the message
That’s probly right now why I might be rappin aggressive

I liked that. Somehow connected wit it.

[Vince]

Who's joey....?....
anyways this was pretty good you must be gettin' better or something some of your other stuff wasn't this good....liked the storytelling.
It did end kinda rushed tho....like you lost your thought..

favorite lines:

And I could blame my child hood but why should I?
What? I fucked up; cuz moms never kissed me goodnight?
Cuz Pops was a bitch so I got hit, but not often with fists…
Ex bitches had me tripping, but stop getting it twisted…
True……………………….
That A lack of affection could neva pass as a blessing
And had me mad; acting depressive,
Always asking dumb questions only to pass on the message
That’s probly right now why I might be rappin aggressive
No back pack to school, I’d act a fool…
Pretend to attend but barely had a lesson

Stay up/

[Esc0BosS]

dizzamn its been a minute...G/L on the feed ppl...or lack of lol

upping

[ELEETE™]

This piece had emotion as its core center...after reading your pieces I realize that's what drives your pieces...it isnt the lyricism or intricacy its the message you want to get a across...you want people to listen an I like that shit...
Your dopest lines...

"I did… but I can promise I never ever chose to;
I never chose to ever distant whoever I was close to"

and

"That A lack of affection could neva pass as a blessing
And had me mad; acting depressive,
Always asking dumb questions only to pass on the message
That’s probly right now why I might be rappin aggressive"

dope piece...

[Esc0BosS]

word... i appreciate that from someone who i'd probably admit is better than me...



siiike...lol gud looking out tho, thanx...

[Esc0BosS]

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