Why Am I Here?

[Kapital J]

Standin on the surface of this Earth with no purpose
Cursed at birth
I should've been name "Worthless"
Every word in this verse hurts when I rehearse it
Yet I keep searchin
Askin what did I do to deserve this
But as I raise more questions
I only get lies in reply
Then people wonder why
I've learned to close my eyes
To people tryin to "help"
The same people I despise
Because all they're tryin to do
Is rid this image from my mind
This vision of the truth
I found hid behind these lies
I've gotten wiser since my youth
Shit isn't it a surprise
It's pointless to deny
No matter how hard you try
The truth will always rise
Like the morning sun in the sky
One thing i've realized
Is when a man lies
A whole nother motha fuckin side of this world dies
And i've been lied to so many times
But still managed to stay alive
You've done enough damage to my life
What's done with the rest
Is left for me to decide

[Dox Phonic]

Ok...
Let me start out by saying there have been a lot worse pieces on RB.
The rhyme scheme was mostly one syllable basicness... the story was really quite good in terms of consistency and not overblowing the emotion...
I liked how you sort of made it a story... rather then just a depressive rant...
If you could flesh this out a little... make it breathe... give it some more complexity... mix up the rhyme scheme... reword it a bit...
It would make a very nice song...
Get into audio man... it's what rap's about.

[Intellexual]

The beginning felt clichéd, the middle picked up a bit and most of the end was filler. Aside from being more creative with how you convey your message, please let go of rhyme patterns, when they're well done. They're only tools for your usage; you're not a slave to them.