Can I Fuck for a Buck......

[143]

bitches rock dicks like roc mics
with croc nike spiked heels and fog lights
acting frog like when nigs pockets on recession
affection switch on to regression
the lesson learn bitches yearn when money to burn
but funny when you got pennies in the urn
like a nigga with a perm, the goal is to keep you hanging
lock on the bra strap, green wads keep you banging
so the game ran i gain a hand up
i keep these hoes laughing like i made it in stand up
cream skeming, she might flip hit my man up
but on the same page, we'll rip the plan up
gotta give it to them when they get me livid
out my post game, got me lifting my foot out the pivot
and i'm planting these hush puppies up in your ass
bitch! how dare you make the dash when i'm out of cash!

it's ching ching bitch! cash it in now
hoes looking for niggas like they cashing in cows
but it's the last call for alcohol and you get a glass of water
if you looking for payday you shouldn't even bother
hoes got the audacity to try to be gassin me
but in reality these bitches be passin me
143 don't give a fuck
i'ma still gets some pussy without a buck

fuck the convo some of yall be givin
half of these hoes ain't interest on how you be livin
she might care but look at the stare from the bar
she looks down to tell if your swell tell her "you are the star"
a nigga like me go to the bar like morpheus
long trench coat, pants tell them "you ain't working us"
thats why hoes got bills stuff in the bra
so when they go to pay, their purse like an empty jar
you gotta peep the little shit, i mean the little shit
why bitches outfit never be having pocket
cause your ends and coinage she wants to dwindle it
then in secret this bitch got a hundred thousand in her locket
this is game and niggas ain't wrote shit
if it was done by us, our wallet have protective coatin'
my dad said " you gotta have bills for a bitch to chill"
then my mom winked to affirm that she got skills!

it's ching ching bitch! cash it in now
hoes looking for niggas like they cashing in cows
but it's the last call for alcohol and you get a glass of water
if you looking for payday you shouldn't even bother
hoes got the audacity to try to be gassin me
but in reality these bitches be passin me
143 don't give a fuck
i'ma still gets some pussy without a buck

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[Esc0BosS]

this was pretty average...but with some above average elements

topic is...eh wdeva, its a light hearted topic...but for some reason you come at it on a serious tip...but had no meaning...fuck knows why, but to me thats just aint a good look

flows is on point for most part, kinda choppy (with some forced multiz) and a couple stretched lines...

fuck it, real talk, the best thing about this to me was the fucking hook, my advice pick a better topic, and just keep writing...dont get it twisted this wasnt horrible by all means, but could do with alotta sharpening...feel me?

neva a hate thing...it is what it is, but take it how u want...stay up #1

[143]

thanks for the critic. just shaking off the dust with something lite

[Intellexual]

I like the insightful tidbits you massaged into the second verse. If the aforementioned tact were consistent, this could be a refreshing piece.

[Cliff.Hanger]

aha

i was reading the first bit n was just like.. ohno

as i read on tho it was actuly nice in some parts
A few nice lines

so the game ran i gain a hand up
i keep these hoes laughing like i made it in stand up

dad said " you gotta have bills for a bitch to chill"
then my mom winked to affirm that she got skills!

both were jokes man
Like this was like sum shit u'd hear on audio to me


my actul feedback would be to pick a less played out topic.
try and get into something deeper
The way u flow n the way u put sum shit together makes u seem like u ahve mad potential.

realtalk

keeep writen n stayyup

[143]

thanks for the crit...for some more deeper shit check out "The Last One"