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    The Way

    woke up a little late, im just glad i got to kiss her
    i dont need self abuse, i got salt and an open blister
    i got about seven people who all should wish me dead
    and laugh when they found out i took care of it myself instaed
    the bass drum that youre hearing is the pounding of my feet
    echoing as im sprinting down this lonely street
    and your voice cuts me deeper than a knife anyway
    alcohol burns the wound so what can i say?
    death never really meant much to me
    he never put a limit on what i could be
    when we walked side by side, hand in hand
    and we sat and had a little talk, man to man
    its been a long time since ive held hands with death
    and ive had a few friends but he claims hes my best
    and ive lived my whole life with one thought on my chest
    the involuntary question of when i want my last breath

    she woke up one last time when she thought i was hers
    to find out i got just what i deserve
    she got up and ran to her other man,
    the one she "used to" love, this wasnt what she planned
    cuz she thought she could juggle two of us at once
    she didnt know, both of us were probably in on her stunts
    when you live your life hoppin from bed to bed
    you leave it to yourself to decide the way it will end
    and even if you got the hooded skull on your side
    that fickle skinless dancer has been known to change his mind
    i too held him in my hand for a time
    too late to realize what he gave me wasnt really mine
    and its been a long time since ive held my breath
    it weighed up, and stayed up tight in my chest
    and i kept on sayin it was for the best
    til the drug in my mind opened up to death

    from the wrists to the breath to the tongue to the sex
    upside down is her meaning of respect
    from theviolence and the breakups to the makeups and the sex
    standing right behind her is the one she now regrets



    (another track off of my album I'm making with some friends. The track after this, you should know, is called "it will end". Audio up when i finish it.)

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    Re: The Way

    and even if you got the hooded skull on your side
    that fickle skinless dancer has been known to change his mind
    Like that line a lot.

    Well your flow is really poetic and your subject matter is unique, not my style or what I exactly prefer but you really do a good job with it. Then again you are able to tell a story in a way that a lot of people wish they could.

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    Re: The Way

    This is a really simple and easy understanding piece... a poetic piece and you did follow along with subject... but try using multies and different vocabulary
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