A Real Assassination of Character

[IconIQ]

Firstly, this is definately a topical piece... on aliens and the dyslexic Canadian offspring of Zoolander... here's some links... i'll get some more in a lil while, just cause..

edit: some more links

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...de-387388.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-387366.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-387166.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ck-387272.html



A Real Assassination of Character

Right now, despite the sight, of a real fly pout
Its no wonder ya hide out, wit' a flow as uneven, as ya right eye brow
Just write in white out, you're a boob, with a dick
How you gonna spit serious dude, with pubes on ya lip?
He'd queue to be ripped, by alien drones
Writin' radiant prose, he was the first on earth, to be anally probed
Maimin' this dope, slash his throat 'til his neck smiles
Forget 'Eight Mile', this dude's bible, is the fuckin' 'X-Files'
You're eerie, ya parents' own, 'conspiracy theory'
Look, the 'albino from Da Vinci', had a kid with Timothy Leary
I'm spittin' it clearly, his hat's jus' an infected bag
For the first dyslexic fag, I've seen wit' cheeks, stamped wit' an anorexic tag
His rap's like a septic tank, n every black man's his idol
But no, he's pro... he did a show once, this one time at band recital
He's mad suicidal, his head's distressed, n gone hollow
Closed lips suggest, its 'cause he's gettin' ready to digest, n swallow
What's he hopin' to find, when he's closin' his eyes?
He's tryin' to open his mind, to make sure his two brain cells, don't go n collide
I ain't gonna lie, he's the hook-nosed, Witch of the West
Everythin' bout the lil' fag is identical to a bitch, minus a chest
Lay him to rest, for verses in which, all his lines are filler
His lips pursed 'til they burst, lookin' like he was birthed, by Ben Stiller

Mr Stiller said junior was duckin' PM's n callouts cause the greys came back for second helpings. Shii.... who knows when he'll be back.

[Tactixx]

you left dope feed on my piece so....

OK....Im guessing there is some sort of hidden beef here??....Im Canadian....But...lets get to your writing...You know they have "strike a pose" battle league right???....Aight...so.....Kinda seemed a little basic from what Ive seen from you..Just seemed like a battle verse to me....the only topic was the opponent....technically speaking it was ok....syllable count/flow fell off a couple of times....basic battle verse to me..keep writing...thanx for the feed.....peace...

[silentAwedience]

This verse was pretty hit and miss. I can tell a lot of talent was behind it, but some of the lines came a little awkwardly worded. I'm not sure what kinda beef you've got, as I'm new to this place, but I can tell this cat isn't very widely liked on this site. A good flow and some good concepts for sure, I'd say a little rhythm can be sacrificed in this case to make your points more clear. Or, keep the rhythm and still improve the points, lol.


You're eerie, ya parents' own, 'conspiracy theory'
Look, the 'albino from Da Vinci', had a kid with Timothy Leary

^LOL. weak set up, but i died at the punch.

[IconIQ]

no real beef, just the comedy option after some smack talk. i don't generally battle and i just got bored waiting for him so decided to write this lol. propz

[silentAwedience]

^lol, for sure. well, good verse all the same bro, lol

[Tactixx]

lol...well then...It had the impact you intended....

[IconIQ]

^ lol its not a battle verse, jus some clownin' shit to make someone laugh lol. n on the flow, i have a odd style i picked up a little while back... can sound awkward in text but works if you can space it while spitting, hence the unusual length of almost all of the bars. i'll be recording hopefully within two weeks when i move, n i'll prolly do this audio for shits n giggles n it'll be easier to pick up on. propz guys.

[Westcoast]

Whether or not you and fazeT's beefing, I gotta say this is a decent and pretty hilarious drop... Aha liked your multies and creativity..

RTF if you get a chance...

September Stories is the title of my thread

[The Genesis]

haha, nice lil diss, good flips on the whole UFO shit, some shit could've been worded better to make it funnier, but overall the lines were creative and effective

"What's he hopin' to find, when he's closin' his eyes?
He's tryin' to open his mind, to make sure his two brain cells, don't go n collide"

^nice

[IconIQ]

i would just like to link to fazet's amazing reply to this piece.

wow... it left me.. speechless.. truly, he wrote a sick piece.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post6818155

i feel like a bully now haha

[IconIQ]

btw propz for feed WC, ill get at ya shit when i move - movin house ya see, jumpin in jus a few mins. 1

[Rosetti Frost]

i must say i have read both yours and FazeT's pieces and yours is much easier to read and flowed much better.........i like the little bit of comedy you added it was a decent drop..........................