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    I Am Stong - Song 2 Lyrics

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    I Am Strong

    His father was a dealer, ran the streets all day
    A pimp leasing women for the sheets all day
    Brought up, to be caught up in the way his father was livin
    Never given the opportunity or support from his community
    To wake up and break up the cycle and take his life back
    Instead, he continues on the path of demolition
    Dead in his head from the wrath of cognition
    He’s created from the fabricated ideas
    He’s conformed from years in the hood
    Misunderstood, inside he fears as his heart fills with tears
    Wants to do good, start livin right and ignite his sons mind
    A vision of life away from guns and crack
    But he’s on track for prison or the cemetery
    To be buried by the only one he loves he shoves
    Aside scary thoughts of being murdered by haters
    Needs guided and taught so he turns to his creator

    This is my life, I’ll try to change
    As I go on, it’s all I know
    When I am weak, then I am strong
    You are my God, to you I belong
    It’s not what I get, it’s what I give
    Please Father, teach me to live

    He wants to put the streets behind him, refine his behavior
    His savior, the Lord to remind him, he finds a job
    For $6.85 an hour, but he’s empowered, his minds
    Optimistic, it’s realistic to continue this route
    Without doubt as he rocks his son to sleep
    There’s a shout, he blocks the door but they sweep in
    Rob the place, and lace the walls with slugs on drugs
    High on meth he’s scared to death that his boy is harmed
    Gets to his room just in time for his sons last breath
    In his arms, he falls to his knees as he pleads with God
    To let them switch places as he faces life with his son
    The one he loves, he braces himself and says..
    “I came to you for direction but you gave me rejection
    Instead of the protection we needed your affection is fake
    It was a mistake even seeking you. Speaking with you every night
    Thought we’d be alright, you’re a fraud, why’d you let this happen?”

    This is my life, I’ll try to change
    As I go on, it’s all I know
    When I am weak, then I am strong
    You are my God, to you I belong
    It’s not what I get, it’s what I give
    Please Father, teach me to live

    He questions the motives of God as he lives
    He gives in, his life has changed with a wife
    And family, his heart remains torn apart from his
    First borns slaying, willing to keep praying and speaking
    To God, seeking resolve for the killing as he evolves
    And began to change as a man to the plan
    God created and patiently waited to perfect
    And connect him to eternity, with a test
    To press him to confess and attest that God
    Is real and heals even the worst of pain
    To remain in our lives, it seems insane the gain
    We receive when we leave our hopes and dreams
    In the hands of our maker..

    This is my life, I’ll try to change
    As I go on, it’s all I know
    When I am weak, then I am strong
    You are my God, to you I belong
    It’s not what I get, it’s what I give
    Please Father, teach me to live
    Last edited by tjacks7; March 5th, 2009 at 04:37 PM

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    Re: I Am Stong - Song 2 Lyrics

    ok, alot of this i didnt like... flow was seemingly on point for most part
    ^ but your rhyme scheme....< you dont really have one, but the pattern in which you rhyming this mad fucks up tho flow...like i dont have a clue what you was trying... in parts its like someone writing a story just occasionally rhyming but with no pattern... iunno, that can work sometimes, i just feel it really didnt with this piece

    content/topic/story... i liked in doses... but there's not enough of a message, or things happenin in the story to have kept me interested all the way through...

    no lie, overall, im not gonna say it was whack...becuz it not, i just think you've got a few of the basics twisted in this piece...

    had you condensed it to half the legnth, scrap the hook, work a structured rhyme shceme, i personally would think it'd come off alot better...

    never a hate thing, it is what it is... but take it how u want... stay up #1
    iBeast

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    Re: I Am Stong - Song 2 Lyrics

    Thanks for the feedback bro, no hate man always workin to get better.

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