SloganZ-vs-Anubis

[$.:SloganZ:.$]

As many barz as what ever
Gluck/ due in an hour

[Anub|s]

just saw it....dis iz ma check.

[$.:SloganZ:.$]

check mate

[$.:SloganZ:.$]

Ive been giving rap tactics practice
since before your parents broke the prophylactic
elevating galactic before they hit the concieving climactic
me and the mic divice stay tight like static to wool fabric
im hauntin your dreams wich means youll be shittn ur matress
i obsess over abstractness when i address yourlyrial flatness
the rapper tab u just act-this cuz u got a pussy like an actress
my foots a pain in ya ass like you sat on a cactus
rip u and ur crew a new so both my shoes get full access
youd prolly like that cuz u a flamer like faggets and matchsticks
stop usin dicks as prep H and chapsticks they bad habits
lettn'em cling to your lips like metal to magnets
just slit ya wrist and become food for the maggets

[Anub|s]

sloganz more played den commercials of nike of last week
when voters be throwin shoes...dis peacnik turns other cheek
0-3? ya yet to see a win...just lyk ya yet to see a clit ring
yer momma wuz last chance....till surgery made her a dragqueen
someone pm feebz, set da bar high, cuz rb's full of whack teens
ya be needin polevault to elevate....n dis aint limbo dat we r talkin
im sure ya got some fuckin prewritten shit dat ya be fast recylin
n if ya seein a hole in o-zone, itz cuz yer garbage producin global warming
fuck dis battle....might as well lose dis shit n give ya 1 christmas gift
save ya 1 sexual harassment lawsuit after sittin on santa's lap for "profit"
last bar n ima put it in quotes for all da voters to copy n paste in red ink
" 'think small' if ya r slogan cuz n it aint volkswagen dat we r dealin"

BORED

[Networth]

Anubis- Your structure was good, and your text flow was on point, the problem with your verse would be that your punches didn't land and also it had a very poor rhyme scheme.

SloganZ- Your verse had okay to decent punch attempts but the problem some would say is structure a bit, But MAINLY that it sounded Audiosh.


Best Lines>>>

elevating galactic before they hit the concieving climactic
me and the mic divice stay tight like static to wool fabric
^^thats good, minus the self glory,,
the rapper tab u just act-this cuz u got a pussy like an actress
my foots a pain in ya ass like you sat on a cactus
^^ Thats decent, shoulda been set up much better..
rip u and ur crew a new so both my shoes get full access
youd prolly like that cuz u a flamer like faggets and matchsticks
^^lol the best punch of the match, but still kinda weak, but funny..

Versus>>>>>

sloganz more played den commercials of nike of last week
when voters be throwin shoes...dis peacnik turns other cheek
^^Decent, shoulda been worded much better...
0-3? ya yet to see a win...just lyk ya yet to see a clit ring
yer momma wuz last chance....till surgery made her a dragqueen
^^thats okay, your best line..


So yeah, I gotta vote SloganZ cause after the lines I quoted, Anubis's verse became very off beat and the ounches didn't stick at all..

[Anub|s]

uppin

[Anub|s]

bump

[Anub|s]

humpty dumpty bumptity.....

[2triple0]

Ive been giving rap tactics practice
since before your parents broke the prophylactic
self-glory
elevating galactic before they hit the concieving climactic
me and the mic divice stay tight like static to wool fabric
again, self-glory
im hauntin your dreams wich means youll be shittn ur matress
i obsess over abstractness when i address yourlyrial flatness
nah
the rapper tab u just act-this cuz u got a pussy like an actress
my foots a pain in ya ass like you sat on a cactus
played
rip u and ur crew a new so both my shoes get full access
youd prolly like that cuz u a flamer like faggets and matchsticks
eh
stop usin dicks as prep H and chapsticks they bad habits
lettn'em cling to your lips like metal to magnets
just slit ya wrist and become food for the maggets
good punch

overall: +1.5

vs.

sloganz more played den commercials of nike of last week
when voters be throwin shoes...dis peacnik turns other cheek
nah
0-3? ya yet to see a win...just lyk ya yet to see a clit ring
yer momma wuz last chance....till surgery made her a dragqueen
someone pm feebz, set da bar high, cuz rb's full of whack teens
lol
ya be needin polevault to elevate....n dis aint limbo dat we r talkin
im sure ya got some fuckin prewritten shit dat ya be fast recylin
didn't rhyme
n if ya seein a hole in o-zone, itz cuz yer garbage producin global warming
lol
fuck dis battle....might as well lose dis shit n give ya 1 christmas gift
save ya 1 sexual harassment lawsuit after sittin on santa's lap for "profit"
eh, wording needed to be better
last bar n ima put it in quotes for all da voters to copy n paste in red ink
" 'think small' if ya r slogan cuz n it aint volkswagen dat we r dealin"
nah

overall: +2

i wasn't feeling sloganz verse that much, and anubis had a few witty punchlines, but his structure was a little messed up. sometimes it was hard to tell where a bar started, and where one ended.... but i am giving my vote to ANUBIS cuz sloganz verse had too much self-glory... some of his verse was alright and hit hard.. but he still needs to elevate a little more.. my advice to anubis would be don't use a three line structure, it doesn't work, or at least your going to receive hate from the voters for it.. i've done it before, and people have voted against me for using it.. so i'm just telling you what a lot of other people might feel.. alright peace