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    sum of my shit

    spittin fire, rippin mics, splittin heads,
    lyrical blades dat cut ya frame 2 shreds,
    im the devils son fuck a prodigal,
    so sick 4 dis world im ILLogical,
    bars so deep dey rip ya kids brain tissue,
    any diss towards me is a deadly personal issue,
    lil wayne has turned rap 2 a fuckin joke,
    if he had 2 battle a girl scout no doubt he'd fuckin choke,
    any real rapper knows he aint sick or raw,
    faggot thinks hes tough ill hav him screamin of the floor,
    all these 1 year rap fans screamin his Numba 1,
    1000 rappers cud break his balls but he hasnt got none,
    the only times he's on top is wen hes ridin a dick,
    2 boost sales he only pretends 2 be in a clique,
    ill rip apart any bitch who thinks ther smart,
    commercial rappers and popstars i cant tell them apart.
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    inhuman, extraterrestial,
    i excel to the next level every decibal,
    a silent assassin hired by the federals,
    to take out these fake MC's in a whisper,
    to many lyrical splinters puncture ya skin you think i missed ya,
    then ya brain kicks in tellin ur nerves i ripped ya,
    insanity overload a crazy mind can never be slow,
    full of hatred ever since i started to grow,
    the rap game u never played u cheated it,
    all games have winners an losers,
    they gonna say anthem defeated it,
    i had mental disorders till the doctor mistreated it,
    now ive surpassed the word illsick
    you gotta be strapped down if u wanna listen 2 my shit.
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    i infect minds to the point where the mind of society splits,
    the difference between good and evil completely flips,
    i can have the hardest rappers screamin for mercy like a bitch with no tits,
    since they pussy anyway an cant handle murderous rips,
    im to sick for hostpital or medication,
    im just glad weed brings me to sedidation without fustration
    so the sickness becomes a missile of concentration,
    to be fired in verbal confrontrations.

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    Re: sum of my shit

    I liked this shit, although the rhyme scheme was simple in most parts a couple lines stood out...

    "inhuman, extraterrestial,
    i excel to the next level every decibal,
    a silent assassin hired by the federals,"

    ^that shit was nice, stay up.

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    Re: sum of my shit

    Was digging the first satnza the most.....where you were chastising Lil' Wayne. That gets overdone on Rb,,,but it was still fun to read...

    The rest of the piece didn't stay on a topic....so I really wasn't feeling the rest.

    In a piece you need to work on talking about one thing....one definite topic.

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