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    My Treasure






    My treasure is my personal evolution as a writer
    A pride-stricken prizefighter buried alive
    No baptisms by fire just endless inquiry
    Right now just listen and sit with me
    David Blaine inside written word, Descartes
    Playing around at Dante's peak, throwing a party
    I so beyond relaity, I don't need morphine or valium
    I could go inside my illusion, turn up the volume
    While the rest of the world suffers apocryphal circumstance
    Blown away by nuclear winter I've learned to work my hands
    Philosophically I've found the perfect stance, its
    Mental martial arts, watch me develop the chi
    While darwinism is physical gentrification, no nazi's developing me
    I see a futre of super-soldiers that have gone power hungry
    Disgruntled ex-patriots that have turned against their Mother country
    Lately it feels as if a voice inside me has been perceived
    Before it was just a fetus, now it can speak and breathe
    I don't see the difference between mantra and music
    All music is a state of trance, thats why Em said "Just Lose It"
    Hypnotizes the teeny-boppers makes them join in group sex
    A duplex in the sky, is the God we find merciful or ruthless
    What if the Hubble telescope is an extension of Babel's Tower
    The seventh trumpet blares, await the meteor showers


    As the meteors strike I think of something deeper to write
    A battle with my own psyche, wrote on it last night
    In my diary I foretold the truth in those four scrolls
    The ones that got buried in the Sea, y'all know
    John the Baptist had baptized them in magic potions
    I'm devoted to the magic flowing in words I wrote
    I could've forecast the end of times in a rhyme
    You would feed it, eat it, delete it....like "DOPE!"
    I feel like I'm the lion trying to preach with muffled roars
    I wish I could just talk but I have to use metaphors
    Imagine trying to reach a congregation with arcane language
    Its like Shakespeare coming back to be the Beatles bassist
    The basics of Sanskrit but is it a sane script
    They say the Bible's a knock-off Hammurabi Code
    Were our favorite prophets just plagiarists?
    What if Lucifer had scrambled the word up
    What if we're Anti-Christian, satanists
    Symbolisms so enigmatic it'd take days to get
    When those days turn to weeks, months, years
    All truth circumsizes and becomes mangled and weird


    Be a fighter in the New Age Crusades


    My treasure is my personal evolution as a writer
    A pride-stricken prizefighter buried alive
    I write about a God...that will save the New World.





    Links:
    Trying To Speak To Ya-Mr. Abstract
    Upon His Grave-Deviate
    Last edited by Vincent Maestro; November 20th, 2008 at 06:01 PM

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    Re: My Treasure

    This was nice bro.
    First line made me want to keep reading.
    You had some beautiful imagery in this, really liked it.
    David Blaine inside written word, Descartes
    Playing around at Dante's peak, throwing a party
    I so beyond relaity, I don't need morphine or valium
    I could go inside my illusion, turn up the volume
    You backed up your ideas and concepts with vivid description,
    and you still managed to control your rhyme scheme and keep a consisitant flow
    Be a fighter in the New Age Crusades

    My treasure is my personal evolution as a writer
    A pride-stricken prizefighter buried alive
    I write about a God...that will save the New World.
    Liked you ending, it was dope...
    I thought your refrences to Jesus were cool
    and not as played as some you here

    Nice piece friend


    Take a look
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-382853.html

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