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    Crazy

    just writing a bit this isnt the full thing


    Hook " Who the hell are you" lemme tell you your nothing youll never be a star dude
    you wont go far though life you see
    cause when your 17 youll have H I V

    "jb your so mean" maybe but someones gotta be
    everyone lies thats a problem see
    thats why i say alotta of these things




    Verse 1

    its enery jb whatever call me crazy
    forever will i be embedded in your brain see
    as i gain speed to make your membrane spacy
    disconet your neck reconect it in another place he he
    all girls are pretty much whores
    "oh realyy" well you almsot had a kid when you were a sophmore
    cause your goin soft core and your gonna have a lot more
    till your sore kids poppin out like they were pop corn {pop pop]
    an fat people scare thee dont believe me
    walkin down the street thinking dont eat me
    "YO thats my pinkie" NO im not a twinkie "
    go to mickey ds and get your self a big treat
    geeze its like evertime i spit
    someone goes balistick there eyes twitch
    "your a bad kid" Why is this
    cause i say what i think maybe you should try it

    "i mean what i say" i mean what a spray is that ok
    hey lets get together and haze all the gays
    fray my enemays daze the memorays

    "what is your problem" i dont know but would you be kidna enough to solve them
    lifes getting rough everybodys so nostalgic
    lifes all shit or whatever you wanna call it

    verse 2


    1 2 skip to my loo
    tie your shoes togerther then i push you
    oh im sorry whoopsie daizy
    i didnt mean to
    though it was entertaining
    i say your rhymes are good even if they are wack
    so when we rap on a track ill outshine your ass
    so when you fall back and get overrlapped
    im like the president i dont give a crap an
    the presidents likes an apple on the tree it looks rockin
    but as soon as you pick it it begins to go rotten
    till your like STOP IT AHH I WANNA SOCK HIM
    Put you gloves on and then begin to bop him "secret service"
    JB!

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    Re: Crazy

    upppiiiiiiiiiiiiin before i leave

    this is meant to be jokish like
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    Re: Crazy

    word I was feeling it...it kinda reminded me off the topics that Eminem used to use around when the Marshall Mathers LP came out.....cool shyt man.
    I was digging the humor too....don't tone it down for anyone.

    Liked these lines alot:


    i say your rhymes are good even if they are wack
    so when we rap on a track ill outshine your ass
    so when you fall back and get overrlapped
    im like the president i dont give a crap an
    the presidents likes an apple on the tree it looks rockin
    but as soon as you pick it it begins to go rotten
    till your like STOP IT AHH I WANNA SOCK HIM


    thats shit was funni as hell mayne.

    But yeah you need to work on Structure and punctuation....the rest was pretty cool and with practice will become more polished. I could hear this in Audio....you seem like you;d be pretty good on a mic.

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    Re: Crazy

    upiin leave links ill reply back
    JB!

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    Re: Crazy

    sinixter g is right bro these are some great lyrics, creativity is shown son

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=380405

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ir-379912.html

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    Re: Crazy

    this was fun to read i liked it would be a really good audio track lol
    vocab coulda bin better, flow was good, multis coulda bin used more and internals woulda bin better....
    but keep going the only way is up check out my newest thread please
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6718009

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    Re: Crazy

    Yes it's good but it doesn't say anything. I'm not saying you got to tell a story or shit but it comes across as a mad freestyle. Like you're saying the first random thing to pop into your head. Flow is good, it's funny and fresh, but you need decide what this track is about.

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    Re: Crazy

    its funny ypu should say that because it was pretty much a freestyle at firstb ut i get what your sayin i gotta kinda make it all glue together
    JB!

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    Re: Crazy

    ehhh, it was ok. the rhymes were basic but entertaining nonetheless, keep at it.

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    Re: Crazy

    good...somethings could have been worked out alittle more but all in all it was a good job... keep it up...

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