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    Lightbulb Northern Lights

    vibes miraculously heating
    others masking the reasons
    people are actually seeing
    the surest sight
    blasting and beaming
    haven't you seen them?
    Northern Lights..




    I remember...
    when you was a fern and wasn't burned in the weather
    now our world's lit by twirling whirlwinds of pleasure
    your my girl for forever, and I can carve it in you
    not an issue, I'll tattoo it on me if your mom'll let you
    charge and step through testing my leverage, thc hides away,
    progressing to help my expression of what a mind could gain;
    forgetting lies and pain, eyes are blazed, she calms nerves
    glossed firm, ready with hairs making memory glands long term,
    got herbs? burn it back into soot, if your life's low
    like the price goes up with casting a hook for fly flows
    tight growth on compiled pockets of forgotten dreams
    might those shocking oddities contain psychotropic properties?
    the mind you lost so suddenly.. what you've not been today
    you lost in a daze, wondering how you've gotten this way
    while weed stalls your dismay, its unlocking a place
    loved cause it's comfortable, find yourself talking too late
    summed up in front of you, spots of green patches the red
    and heavy lids, its like I got 2 ten gallon hats on my head
    your passionate end left me where I'm not certain whats real
    inverted inside some circular cells, deciding virtuous skills
    our lurking is filled
    with micro(de)fying cycles of shining that took what atoms see..
    the riddle lies in a billion little eyes looking back at me,
    gods of good anatomy.. I vow now to never sell again, then blink..
    never felt a friend and then think about intelligence and instinct
    this celebrant has lived sweet.. she's inspired me, entirely
    used to freestyling to you, so you can help me write a scheme
    like a king.. enticingly, i'm applauding your long stems
    buds throbbing from forcing portions of carbon and tungsten
    never stopping consumption.. yes, I voted yes in question 2
    not the fucking other dudes, nothing substitutes instead of you!
    the hate thats bred intends to lose what heartless intentions do
    cops with thoughts to set the rules, call this goddess - impeccable..
    in general, I don't see how smoking weed effects the families
    I cant believe..
    justifying the fruits that bless the plants and trees
    its a damn stampede and on that track, I need to know,
    I have these seeds to grow in the cracks of streets with hope
    but no hope is evil though, something you should just leave alone
    till our suns bakes a beaming gloam and responsibility is shown!!!

    so until then..
    our love remains unseen
    people can hate and bring
    -a fine to pay,
    increasing my pride to say
    "it wont change a thing."
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    Re: Northern Lights

    Really feeling the rhyme scheme like the flow and the multis all in all it's good didn't quite get the intro tho, maybe it's not for me to get but never the less great job. Hope to see more from you, one thing you can work on tho is emotion and puncuation.
    your vocab is great but other than what i said you got it and it's harder to get emotion cause it's written instead of recorded but hey keep at it...
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    Re: Northern Lights

    the whole things packed with emotion?> lol
    im hitting your link up yo
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    Re: Northern Lights

    dope piece, i can def relate and the rhyming was complex. it was a smooth read and kept me interested throughout the whole thing. the topic of weed is taken in very different ways but this one was approached real uniquely. you went in depth. i liked this part a lot, it stood out to me...


    tight growth on compiled pockets of forgotten dreams
    might those shocking oddities contain psychotropic properties?
    the mind you lost so suddenly.. what you've not been today
    you lost in a daze, wondering how you've gotten this way
    while weed stalls your dismay, its unlocking a place
    loved cause it's comfortable, find yourself talking too late


    me and a friend was reading this shit, we both think its dope. ight well keep writing. peace.

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    Re: Northern Lights

    damn up again.. leave links
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    Re: Northern Lights

    I really liked this alot....one reason is cause you're so dope with the multies man:

    in general, I don't see how smoking weed effects the families
    I cant believe..
    justifying the fruits that bless the plants and trees
    its a damn stampede and on that track, I need to know,
    I have these seeds to grow in the cracks of streets with hope
    but no hope is evil though, something you should just leave alone
    till our suns bakes a beaming gloam and responsibility is shown!!!


    Those were some of my favorites but there were alot of quotables in this.
    I like how this wasn't your typical "I love mary J" piece or whatever.
    You seemed more like the type of guy that would get a petition started to make it legal and study that it doesn't really have ill effects on the health of the user,

    glossed firm, ready with hairs making memory glands long term,
    got herbs? burn it back into soot, if your life's low
    like the price goes up with casting a hook for fly flows
    tight growth on compiled pockets of forgotten dreams
    might those shocking oddities contain psychotropic properties?
    the mind you lost so suddenly.. what you've not been today
    you lost in a daze, wondering how you've gotten this way


    I liked the flow of this part also...it had some good assonance in it,
    Your flow and sometimes humorous tone made this a really fun read,
    I read it with a smirk the whole time.

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    Re: Northern Lights

    hmm....gotta say, this was pretty nice. slick rhyming made it an easy read. I've read ode to tree pieces before but this rank up there with some of the better ones. And haha, ill reference to the question 2 thing (im from boston also). A very impressive showing, bruh. keep it up.



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    Re: Northern Lights

    bumping......
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