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    "The Black Hand"1st edition

    Reaching for memory of some kind of morality
    Breaching normality to come find sanity
    Only to discover a rare species of so called humanity
    Phony undercovers sharin pieces of info tryin 2 corral the revolutionary
    Testimony of everyday survival in the “mano negra” cartel
    Test a homie I don’t play we burn rivals like a “mexicano noreaga” I spark hell
    I began as a man into the “Black Hand” back in my homeland
    I ran with a old man wit a black hand they called “mano negra” understand?
    My plan was to hold grams an stack grands all In one hand
    Oldman was so cold wit the hand blasting a mack a they say it aint real man
    Prosthetic arm an a thousand acre piece of land
    Cows processin farm an a hacienda were the keys land
    Not Escobar this is “ochoa’s” rubber seal an a stamp
    Got to hard “la costa es nostra” drug or deal in my camp
    Shot an scared I got my roster…plugg ya for meal naw im the“champ”
    I earned every thing I own nobody gave me a pitty
    Ill burn every living thing an disown my body B-4 I say they gave me a penny
    Got connected from point A an me being B i supplied the C
    Now I infected the boiling point an im seeing thugz die for notes C
    that’s the game of the hustle…constantly fightin the cycle for rank an status
    facts an shame i muster…unconsciously gainin a title and thank god who had this?
    back to the oldman who gave me my post
    infact the whole coast man…he made an no need to boast
    appear an look like average joe but little do they know
    here stood life of a savage narco but riddle an never show
    disguise and put blinds on the enemy
    realize that crooked minds are made of money
    but money dont make the man…a man makes the currency
    an nobody takes notice to who u really personify to be
    an everybody breaks focus an u nearly cant diversify me from anybody
    with the minimal of words he was so deep and poetic
    didn’t even know it….be who you are never show it….



    to be continued
    Last edited by Mr.Profit; November 7th, 2008 at 03:56 AM

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    Re: "The Black Hand"1st edition

    it was illl how you were telling the story of a guy thats in a Cartel...."blackhand"...was a real gang too right...nice story.

    what you need to work on is the technical stuff like structure and shortening lines r whatever. It woulda been cool to see you write using some better Vocab or whatever.

    Stay up and peace outt.

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    Re: "The Black Hand"1st edition

    thanx by the way mano negra is an old man the head of a cartel an this is a true story beleive or not...

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    Re: "The Black Hand"1st edition

    upin

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