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    In the Fast Lane


    I flow gasoline and spit oil
    cause- there's no mastering these rich spoils
    of fire- to make these kids boil
    when I turnover eighteen on thick soil
    and weight stays movin'
    like freight trains cruisin'
    gotta flip n' push this liquid kush
    in eight great movements
    in your state - nine to five, like
    interstate - ninety-five
    on the east coast, with the most
    sinners raised to ride or die
    I ride to fly, on broken wings
    my pride beside my coat and rings
    from a pro bowl, where barred means no holds
    and a low blow, is wet tar on a slow road
    start where the planes land, end where the boats go
    all with stained hands, an hour for ten at Sunoco.
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    Put down the pebbles in my hand, climbed a ladder, put a brick right through your window.
    "You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!

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    Last edited by Steven William; October 16th, 2008 at 01:36 PM
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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    This obviously was a rhythm piece....seemed almost like just an exercise for you and it was quite uncanny how the poetry just seemed to flow from you like that.....thats how I wanna get my multies down pack or whatever.
    Seems short pieces are in style now....liked that aspect that you said alot with a few Lines///

    Piece and good shit....my fav lines were:

    from a pro bowl, where barred means no holds
    and a low blow, is wet tar on a slow road
    start where the planes land, end where the boats go
    all with stained hands, an hour for ten at Sunoco



    stay up.

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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    ill hit this piece with some feed soon...just dont think i forgot
    Writeobots...roll out

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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    cough cough
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    Put down the pebbles in my hand, climbed a ladder, put a brick right through your window.
    "You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!

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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    lyrically...it seemed like you put some thought into it...i didnt like the drug references but at least you approached it with a bit of a different flare...not the same ol' mention of keys O's rocks and pounds and sh!t like that...some people around here that talk about such things should hit you up and ask how to add a creative approach to it...the flow was nice...rhyme scheme was on point, pretty consistent...all in all this was a decent short drop
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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    Obviously not a piece which holds any deep meaning, more a practice or something, nice flow witch ups though and lyrical flair was evident. All in all a good short piece, nothing overly interesting but it did have it's clever moments.

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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    Nice flow...Multies were going crazy...although this is a an old peice..i will love to see wat you can do now with the multies..but overall this was a pretty hot drop in my eyes....look fowarding to seeing more keys ..

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    Re: In the Fast Lane

    Yea this seemed a little effortless, in a good sense.
    I think you got the writting thing down packed so I have no need to complain about anything.....yet. lol

    I'll be lookin for a real piece u write in the future...

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