Dear RB

[Writeamus Prime]

ay man...keep your head up...my piece "The Nigger Perspective" made HOF(and the dude that gave me THEE most props was a white dude i was sort of net beefing with) so there is hope for what you do fam...keep writing about the struggle and open eyes and minds...you will get your respect...and if you dont...at least you know you have conveyed truth....

and this...shall set you free

[Compton.]

This is dope as fuck. How you expressed how you honestly felt. Against all the bullshit. Flow was solid, rhyme scheme was great. Quoting was good, helped it go along with everything else. This was very dope. hence, I'm nominating this...in a second, but yea I thought this was more of poetry

...

from one extreme to the other?

i might make a piece bitching about bullshit votes and feed, see if i can grab myself a couple of dickriders along the way.


this is nothing against you chris, but the piece as a whole was just pretty good. nothing spectacularly hall of fame worthy as this dude is claiming though....

sorry, had to rant instead of feed.

[Cody Nash]

you already know what I think chris... we had this conversation.



it's good. the writing... everything's just pretty straight forward...
the point was made, and I guess all you can do is keep doing you,
not for the people, but for you. you'll always have fans, and you'll
always have haters... it's the circle of life

*MUFASA*


lol, but yeah, keep it up..

[Ascend]

First off, fuck the naysay, you rocked this shit. It's rare to see such powerful emotion paired with good writing so this was quite enjoyable. Vocab, Multi's, Meta's, and everything was on point. I'm not a fan of the poetry like structure but you pulled it off nicely. And as for quote worthy lines...

See, I feel pain in my chest,
So I write my poems.
Spill my heart to these kids,
like I know ‘em

^I'll start with this. Very dope in my opinion and I felt it so much because of how true it is. I've often shared some of my deepest personal thoughts with people with no avail.

They don’t want truth,
Nor do they want facts, people.
I caught my last 3 L’s,
Cause I wrote about Black people.

^Pretty harsh and am sure no one wants to hear it, but even more than that...No one wants to believe it. Mainly because it forces people to reasses their own opinions and thoughts. Good 'n.

Better than my Legends work,
So you know that it hurt,
When I lost the battle,
To Brandon’s mediocre verse.

Maybe I’m wrong and arrogant,
For thinking he didn’t out-write Chris.
Or maybe it’s because,
I dropped lines like this:


Quote:
Originally Posted by Chris Black
I learned rhythm, through repetition
and soul, through death.
The cold had crept into the hole in my chest.
The hole that was left, by hope, when it fled.


When I saw I lost that battle,
I tried to deny it.
How could I loose,
To lines like this:


Quote:
Originally Posted by Brandon Cee
Let the chalice bleed the work of sweat and tears for easy jobs
While the hog grips his balls and shares sex with sleezy snob

But maybe he did deserve the win,
So I kept trucking it,
& wrote a verse against Mariah.
I was loving it

It was one of my illest.
No one could deny this.
“That Nigger Shit” was the title,
It went something like this:


Quote:
Originally Posted by Chris Black
I’ll spit this nigger shit until my people are done with tears.
Until we run the sphere, and the cops aren’t on dudes.
Until blacks can sit under ANY FUKCIN' TREE THEY WANT TO!
Until artists aren’t forced to follow the latest rap trends.
Until Bill O’Reilly wakes up with Black skin!!
Until Bush votes for Obama!. THAT’s WHEN!!

Then Mariah dropped a verse,
& I was mad about something.
She wrote a verse,
& managed to talk about NOTHING:


Quote:
Originally Posted by Mariah
The last speech won awards - that scene in the backseat of a Ford
While being ignored never struck me with a bad string in it's chord

Yet her rambling won that batte,
& I can’t even cope.
No surprise she was discovered,
Recently aiming for votes.

^One helluva quote I know but I couldn't seem to narrow it down, it's like the climax in a good movie almost. I really felt the quotes you added in, it painted the picture nicely and provided ample insight too.

I’m going to write “that nigger shit,”
No matter the cost.
I’ll spill my heart to you,
& take the GOD-DAMN LOSS!!!!

^And finally...This shit was dope. Shows how your willing to stand up for your convictions no matter the cost.

I don't want people to think I'm partial because I just wrote a piece with similar feelings because it's not that...This was just a nice read. Seldom I felt weakness in this and if there was, I probably just missed it from the overwhelming emotion. And maybe this isn't any consolation but I read both the battles,...You were robbed. And I don't believe this is a piece about you bitching either, if expression is going to be portrayed as bitching...Then ban me. And I never call a topic played if you do it better than the last man. 8.5/10. Keep up.

Rtf on this, thanks.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...me-379215.html