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    I Watch Her


    'I Watch Her'
    by Stock


    I felt something for you, which I don't usually go through
    Pains in my chest, butterflies, and a feeling or unrest
    Your face, your lips, your hair, your smile, your laugh
    The way you act, your body, shaped like an hour glass
    You walk around, and I just follow like your shadow
    If you slow down, I slow down, if you go fast, I go faster
    I do this all knowing this lust, will end up a disaster

    A month goes by, and I'm still following the leader
    Going in circles, looking for a pain that is familiar
    You are my love, but I think you just don't know it...
    If I'm wrong, please girl, would it kill you to show it...
    This must be love, it must, beneath, I feel like a poet...
    Not got money for love, so I'll borrow some and owe it
    I feel like I could tell you everything, without any words
    As time goes by, is this love or just a misplaced curse

    A year as gone by, and still, you still don't know me
    But I know you; very well, on the inside you are lonely
    I want to let you see me, but this has got to far....
    I'm the man, who hides behind the wall, timing
    You’re routine, everyday and every place you visit
    I spend my days, looking for new ways to find you

    The man, the stalker, and the one the police call 'watcher'
    Cause everyday I'm there, but you still pass by me
    Yes, I am 'The Watcher' of you and your family!
    Last edited by Alphaeus; October 2nd, 2008 at 09:45 PM

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    Re: I watch Her

    Fuck OM, I'ma start leaving some feed.

    A year as gone by, and still, you still don't know me
    But I know you, very well, on the inside you are lonely

    Only lines I liked in this. Just because of how deep the emotion really is there and I can relate to that sooo well in past relationships, but anyway...this whole piece was weak. Very bad flow, like wow...you didn't really have much going in the way of words, to simple and the whole vibe of the piece just seemed so forced and not much thought was put into it, this is deff the weakest piece i've seen from you. Sorry for the bad feed. Pz.
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    Re: I watch Her

    I actually posted this up because it got such good feedback when I posted it for a topical battle. I posted it in Open Mic, to see what others thought of it

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-376627.html

    But don't worry it's all good

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    Re: I watch Her

    wow, it's kinda creepy, nothing like being a stalker I guess, I thought the lyrics we ok, but I don't really think it's a weak post, just a little weird, but to each his own.

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