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Thread: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

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    Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]


    Reclusive Rehab..
    {A Dopey Collab}

    Bobericc ft. Ntalek


    can you fix what hasn't been broken?

    ..then leave it alone
    .........or brake it down....

    you wouldn't lie to me, but you wouldn't lie for me?
    what if you were a dieing breed, never true to society
    pursuing propriety.. to take this devious skill
    a lifetime featuring kills, watch hell peak in my cell
    self defense is real, should I have to be in this jail?-
    -my mind, I don't believe in appeal, I'm treated as frail
    but I eat through the veils of time, it's a trail of lines
    to intersect, ain't breaking my skin just yet, peal or slice
    take the deal and die, real quick, because you know my style
    is real sick, it's the death penalty of rap, but no ones trialled
    no ones wild enough, they think I'm fucking hiding the stuff
    I see them trying to bluff, and ask myself, they spying for what?
    want to know my life and its slumps? you'll hate the world man,
    you can get to know it first hand, when i brake your verse in,
    the second and third land.. shocked, it's end's falling imminent
    them volts are medicine, when them stupid insults are insolent..
    shock therapy, isn't it? turn it into an abandoned shortage
    of who are trying to kill hip hop... but just cant ignore it..
    the next man's endurance is fucked up by phantom forces,
    my solidarity's damaged, it dances than chants in chorus..
    rap's our beloved, dared, aborted.. the hole your choosing
    compatible to enemies, the natural complexity to overdo it,
    flowing fluent, through your dreams of seeing eased rhymes
    so long you say it's random.. you need to read it three times!
    meeting neat eyes- fists that fold away the key to blow my brain,
    sharper than a sword in closer range, one you got to hold and raise
    then brake off of my shoulders blade.. with your slower swings,
    you better choke or change, I already got the rope to hang
    the lower laid, underdog I'm hunter for.. that they say is me!
    I angrily take a hit, your beautifully facing this like maybelline,
    minds making it vacantly - vague.. I wish rap was sacredly praised
    hope's farther than this fucking soap opera that patiently waits
    for aimlessly aimed pieces... that are not worth this emergency
    certain insurgency... you're all considered the purest impurity
    to my insubordinate urgencies. Fuck the law, ya'll stand to suck dick
    and you can't become it, while ya'll flow like cramps in stomachs,
    like my meaning - what your here and stuck with..

    [the critics need to take a break!!]

    What happened to the rap game this preposterous
    All they talk is materialistic glistening objects
    Nobody really cares if your seats are ostrich
    Or your magazine clips in which you keep the cartridge.
    Streets delete the process when only speech is profit.
    Just as long as the people cop the so called hot shit.
    The time still ticks with no Jacob therefore
    I wont stop the tock for no hater.
    To many fake rappers that talk about paper
    and all type of gator's with colors like now and laters.
    Callin the women dip sticks cause they dig all flavors.
    before your hit, no gliss, advanced video favors.
    Only got cake because of waivers, executive
    saviors, pocket munching money cravers
    you couldn't repay them even with your weight up.
    So now you in a hole cratered another image catered
    a tratior to your fans and insulting the creator.
    The shit's tragic now adays how hit's happen,
    Another's style of rapping mixed with shitty adlibs.
    There's no compassion all the raps is missing substance.
    If you drool over jewels you fools is missing something.
    Damn pressing you've hit the button
    because even in a Royce you're missing Buddens.
    Childern not knowing alphabets but every line
    they can rhyme the cussing. Instead of books
    these so called crook's the topic of discussion
    Now they fussing over who's buzzing but use nothing.
    I hate rap cause it's Hip hops crude cousin.
    You buffoon's bluffing with the stuff in your rhymes
    You've killed rap yet you've made Hip Hop sublime.

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    Alright this pieceis by far some of the dopest shit I've ever seen come from you and boberric i seen better, but this is still in the same league as some of your better pieces. I'ma honest and real person so frankly speaking I don't have alot of time and I type slow as fuck so please excuse me if I don't give you a full interpetation of what I think of your piece. One thing I goto say is that I loved this lyrical piece for it's honesty and realness and it's fluid flow..both had there own style and pace as for the flow I deffinently liked the later rather than the former more, because it gave great examples to rode well with the message you guys were aiming for, it made an great closer. The start came off as the more... subtle dope side of the piece less aggresive than it's latter, kinda like how little brother tend to spit on some of there tracks. The first part was deffinently easy to read along with and I barely had to pause while reading this piece. You kept me intrtigued and saying dam thats a dope line after line after line. Although I gotta say most collabs on rb tend to come off more like a cypher and I seen that same presense in your piece, I would advise for you two to keep a common flow with eachother, but often some readers tend to get bored and that could affect their interest in a piece if done wrong..not many could pull it off..

    Anyways dope shit man and as for returning the favour, just remember the respect I showed you guys and do as you wish when you see mines. Im not dropping feed for feed just as an act of kindness..
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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    real good drop guys... the first stanza, whoever it was... guessing it was bob... that shit was complex, real deep... the rhythm was smoothe as fuck and every line rolled RIGHT off the fuckin' tounge... really enjoyed that... ntalek, or whoever did it second, that was dope too... you had some nice lines, the now or later line was cool and a bunch of others like that... the point of the piece was solid... you guys took what could've been a simple rant piece and busted out some major standpoints on the subject... really liked reading it, SERIOUSLY... it's good to see that more than one group of people are noticing the change in the rapping/writing scenes... I like the money isn't everything feel to this shit too... like the bling's shine has blinded the people... real deep stuff... great read as a whole... styles clashed well... thanks fellas...



    nom'd...


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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    appreciated...and feed returned...ups.

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    Im glad this got a nom...
    This had SO much intelligence and depth. The rhyme scheme was brilliant in both verses, it never killed the sentences and made things sound odd, it flowed beautifully. The imagery and metas used to describe emotions, situations, locations, all that; was amazing. You guys have so much intelligence wrapped in these bars. The style of both of you guys are very different but it works together SO well. Seriously, this is an amazing drop. Thanks for the read.

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    Ntalek, I'm glad you recomended me to read your collab.
    You both wrote extremely deep and intellectually inclined verses.
    Your style's seemed to guide effortlessly across the page and never once did I lost track.
    It was a down to earth, and straight forward about how things are moving in different directions now. Good job on the writing to both of you, Imagery was pretty damn good, there was nothing wrong with this peice at all, you both are skilled writers and this shows the talent you both have.

    This was a wonderful read and, in all honesty you dpn't even have to feed mine at all.
    The read here was that damn good.

    Congrats on the NOM.

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    thx...more love people..

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    This was probably the dopest shit i've ever read in open mic for the last 3 years, for real. The multies and internals kept coming and coming and the flow was just so smooth too that this drop can be considered flawless. after reading the first verse, it said take a break, i actually stood up from my desk and stretched and was lik "damn that shit was fucking dope". lol. then the second verse was dope as well. you also kept the multies and internals coming and coming and the flow was very smooth, and overall dope shit, no doubt. nice writing guys. nominating it.

    rtf when u have time.
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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    *applauds*

    Really good job, guys, its pretty damned long and usually I find myself wanting pieces to end that are this kind of length, but I wanted it to go on. Really some relentless rhyming in this, Ntalek you turned up your rhyme game to match Bob and it came out wonderfully. Bob, this one line struck me as so funny:

    flowing fluent, through your dreams of seeing eased rhymes
    so long you say it's random.. you need to read it three times!
    A dope "fuck you!" to your critics, though I think you need to realize that what sounds good in your head may not always translate to the reader, we do not think like you or know what you mean by some of your words, so I think sometimes you might know what you mean but you don't help the reader out enough, that's why we say it's random. Gotta help people get in your head.

    Ntalek, I thought ur part of the piece summed it all up really well, it opened dope and closed dope, I mean, I think this might be some of the best writing I've seen from you. I was impressed and happy for you to see this kind of shit. Anyways, really well done, it took me a minute to get to this and sorry for that, but it was well worth the read.

    Nice job, guys. It's already nom'd deservingly.

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    word Eng you just put a smile on my face...thx my dude!

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    yup thanks for the feed everyone, its appreciated
    im returning the favs
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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    more love...!

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    Scared of a lil reading ppl??

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    Re: Reclusive Rehab [A Dopey Collab]

    well, considering I should have dropped that third verse like yall niggas asked me too.
    I guess I owe you the feed.

    This was pretty sick, I'm not gonna break down each verse. Both of you came with content that was packed with multis, complex but nice scheming an just overall fluidity. Everything in the piece was pretty solid, a bit long but still a great read. I think it deserves the nom it got, definitely some real vivid outlook on the rap game and such, imagery was there in some aspects - how fluid the entire piece was and how the styles meshed is what made this that much more enjoyable.
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