Universal Mind

[Dose Blotter]

I wrote this last night when i was tripping, not that great..though i want to see what others think of it.



Time Has Just Shifted
The Continuim is Dripping Glimpses of Dismebered Past
My Visions Been Predicted by Miniture Surrender Flags
EyeWitness to Images That Catagory Light Bulbs (Huh?)
Subcouncious Given Glow As I Stand Before The Tight Rope
Take the Scaffolding through my Cranium Laboratory Side-show
Where Pacaso Art Decorates The Battle Stadium Inventory Silo
Cobble Stone Recollection Jigsaws Behind My Double ParaScopes
The Doors Of Perception Have Crumbled Inside My Hubble TeleScope

Wisdom Is Granted, Infact This Wizards Enchanted
If We "Talkin Acid?"
You Dont Want To Rap Cause My "Jaws Collapsing"
Adapting to The Habbitat Where I Was At Peace To Walk As Peasant
But My Ragged Maps Have Keys That Just Unlocked a Legend
Twice Born with a Rhyme sword, Mind Shield And Knights Armor
I Can Lance-a-Lot Of Bitches While My Pen-Dragons Like Arthur
With My Eyes Finally Proper Nolonger A student of The Years
I Fall Back Within The Darknes, Which Is My Pupils In The Mirror

[Dose Blotter]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ow-375985.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-375982.html

For some reason the link button isnt working

[Dose Blotter]

Was it that bad?

[Pious]

nobody's gonna say it? fuck i'll say it. good work man keep it up.

[Touch.]

the first verse was the best out of the 2 but the first didnt make much sense...the second did but the tone wasnt the same as the first..if the first was in the same tone as the second then im sure it would be more understandable . the long words worked well with eachother and its flow was good...i can see some potential here so keep it up.

leave feed on this please

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...03#post6561903

[M-Phantom]

Dope.

[Dose Blotter]

Thanks for the read...it is kind of all over the place,but i was high as fuck..

Anybody else know how i could better this?

[Rogue`]

i was like this segment the most flow and vocab nice

The Continuim is Dripping Glimpses of Dismebered Past
My Visions Been Predicted by Miniture Surrender Flags
EyeWitness to Images That Catagory Light Bulbs (Huh?)
Subcouncious Given Glow As I Stand Before The Tight Rope
Take the Scaffolding through my Cranium Laboratory Side-show
Where Pacaso Art Decorates The Battle Stadium Inventory Silo
Cobble Stone Recollection Jigsaws Behind My Double ParaScopes
The Doors Of Perception Have Crumbled Inside My Hubble TeleScope

[christopher dre]

if you were to rap dis over the instrumental from nike boots youd have a nice little hit to work wit. keep up the good work your lyricism is hella tight.