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    Renascence Man

    I bring back things that are foreign to you
    Yeah thats all that I do.....nostalgia
    Its my favorite pasttime, boring to you
    You'd only read it if it came with a chorus r two
    Watch my shit score with filler and poor interludes
    get into dudes with a flow thats offbase
    I grew up on dudes like Tupac and Scarface
    I know Scarface hell nah not the real one
    Never been signed to the Roc but I dealed some
    How does it feel son it feels like the real Sun
    Dropped out the sky and landed by your heels, run

    a rhyme from yesteryear engrosses the narrator....

    Looking at the future of rhymesayers with minds basic
    in my mismatch asics I've fortified great scripts
    see critics saying he in autopilot thats, baseless
    Ghostface killer I raided the base faceless
    This is not carbon monoxide homie you can taste this
    Why can't I be enlightened cause I get high and wasted?
    I remember when everyone screamed thuglife
    to the December wind while Machiavelli
    smiled from a grave that he was never in
    I remeber the old sinizter G. shit I was better then
    I was better when everyone said I was a total slob
    but now circle jerks eat it up anf give it the royal nod
    I'm just jotting for free I'd see this as an awful job
    Hey heard someone say being a lyricist pays
    but with all the bad criticism I'd rather work for
    MINIMUM WAGE.......I AM THE RENASCENSE MAN.




    ^^^^^^^^peep wale.....that go-go shit from DC and virginia is hella hott

    peace.

    I'll drop links later....keystyl'd this.

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    Re: Renascence Man

    lol wassup wit the advertising of that video....anyhoo

    it was choppy here and there....lacked flow some places...and yes as you said since you keyed it it was understandable....i dont get the misspelling of renaissance man...wat i am missing?

    but...but you had some real moments.... [infact next time try make the whole piece in the same par as these ones....]

    my favorite parts:


    Quote Originally Posted by Sinizter G. View Post
    Watch my shit score with filler and poor interludes


    in my mismatch asics I've fortified great scripts
    see critics

    Ghostface killer I raided the base faceless

    This is not carbon monoxide homie you can taste this
    Why can't I be enlightened cause I get high and wasted?
    sorry if i was being harsh...but too much dicksucking goes on in OM cuz of insecurity as if not to attract bad feedback for their own piece....but fellatio like those really dont help....one should always give PROs as well as CONs

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    Re: Renascence Man

    upping for more feeedd.

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    Re: Renascence Man

    Decent idea, bad execution. Welcome back to RB though Vince. I enjoyed the first verse more than the second, you seemed more comfortable writing that part, seeing as the second part was like a little under-developed. I liked the ending however and that's always a good thing to end strong. Overall, you've got more in you, but it wasn't horrible - mediocre really. Sorry, but good luck. Peace.

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    Re: Renascence Man

    word....thanks for the feed mariah.....I just hurry up and keystyld this just to say I'm back for a lil while pz....and once again thanks for the feed.
    anything you have to say about my writing I'm pleased to take into consideration.


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