(Hit'N'Run) Mary Mary. Ft Uben, J6ft, Mordor

[Uben. Sonned]

Johnny6ft
Inhale... don't cough, fucker, hold it
And relax, breathe out, man this winter's snow's the coldest
I'm the boldest with my smoke, and people know this
Carry a vegetable patch in my pocket, and roll spliffs
Catch me playing with the fairies similar to fag-hags
But it's the voices in my head shouting when i take drags
Staring at the clouds, floating by, a potent high
Eyes redder than a stoplight; give this dope a try
I spit an alcoholic verse to show you some proof
And when i step out there's smoke blowing out of the booth
It's truth, every word, unlocked in every herb
On the verge of being zombified, speech is very slurred

Mordor
Ignore Johnny, he's always coughing six feet under,
you want a real good deal then stick with these fuckers.
No, I sold out on shrooms -- for you; I bring pills,
chew that bitch and you'll live life like a king will.
All different colors; red, blue, yellow and purple,
buy some of these and you'll breathe in circles.
I'm not messing around, you can test the rounds,
it's a sing along how Mary-go-round -- up & down.
You want a few more, sorry bro now find the door,
swollow another and your mind will die on the floor.

Hook
Mary, mary, quite contrary
How does your garden grow?
You've got the greenfingers, 10 different weed-bringers
And 17 types of blow
You've got mushroom patches to school the dumb classes
Teach them this perfect science
You've got a herion whip for this acid road trip
Mary mary's got the pipe appliance

Uben. Sonned
As I'm hitting this bong I'm watching the projecter...
Top it off with some hash, now I'm feeling like Mary's protecter
Zoned out eyes glossed, slouching even further on the couch
Hand me that tray filled with buds greener then oscar the grouch
Bringing out that hooka, Hit'N'Run we blaze nothing but the best
With smoke so dense it feels like Tyson crushing your chest
My own brand of weed, and it's making it's way up the ranks
Weedologist, I've only got mother earth to thank...

Hook
Mary, mary, quite contrary
How does your garden grow?
You've got the greenfingers, 10 different weed-bringers
And 17 types of blow
You've got mushroom patches to school the dumb classes
Teach them this perfect science
You've got a herion whip for this acid road trip
Mary mary's got the pipe appliance

Uben. Sonned
I'll feed my addiction I grab one out the sack
Head over to the pipes,which bowl I should pack
Grab the scissors and snip it off the stem
This is a way of life it's not a trend
I wake and bake and I hit deep and sleep
This shit hits straight to the mind till my thoughts leak
Fill it to the top with nothing but the finest
While Johnnys got the next bud and grinds it
Fuck it man grab the papers and roll up some joints
If you don't understand well your missing the point
Take a puff off this weed and learn a thing or two
Get crazy and you better call me the king of Doobs
Oh wait, I found my glorious opium stash box
If were ever short of drugs you know we going to crash locks
Break in stoned and take that money to get my rush
No worry bout a job so aint got to get the system flushed
And if you aint into this fine plant I got to ask why?
So simply put would you for me...Just give it a try...

[Uben. Sonned]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-375160.html

[Johnny 6-feet]

2nd link- http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...lk-374933.html

Looking good man, can i just ask you to make one small adjustment? Could you put my verse and morder's verse back to back before the first hook and put the hook in italics to help distinguish it? Other than that, i reckon this collab turned out nicely, got all the drug imagery mixed in and used solid vocab and rhymes schemes to make this flow.

Hit n Run baby.

[Uben. Sonned]

FIXED

Let's get some feed now.

[....Gone.]

This is was great, good topic. Flowed wwell, hook was decent. Vocab was pretty good. lack of multies tho in some verses. Styll a dope read tho. Keep it up., I liked it. All did pretty good job, went well with others. Dope.

[Uben. Sonned]

Bumping this upp...

[soulstice.]

ok so, this was cool, nothing too deep, just a fun verse on drugs, i liked the hook,it summed up the piece well. anyway, i can't go and critique the story, or dissect the metaphors so im just going to go with, good job

johnny - i liked your verse the best, the winter snow line was dope, and it flowed very well, well done, mordor - your rhymes were kind of bumpy here and there, but still, pretty good job carrying the flow on.. uben - your more of a paint an iamge kind of guy, tell a story, this was ok, but it wasnt your strength i dont think.. flow was meh, content was decent

overall, cool job

hit up profit>prophet.

word

[Steven William]

Wow WHAT THE FUCK - I had detailed feed typed up and it refreshed and disappeared.
One more time.

Johnny - you opened this nicely, you set the tone for the entire drop and it came off a well done verse in my opinion. Not your best, but sure as hell not bad at all. You got me hooked, and the topic is cool - it's not original or dope, but it's fun. A lot of my drops lately have been drug related, probably because of the shit I've been doing to myself lately, but that's beside the point. You brought all the mechanics for a good verse, multis - flow - rhyme scheme - hooking the reader as well.
Good job.

Mordor - you may be one of the most underrated topical heads that posts up on a consistent basis and I'm going to tell you why you get so much shit and are underrated.
You're not consistent. You drop a lot of verse and some are dope shit, and some of them honestly are actual shit.

If you keep dropping like you dropped here though, you'll be alright soon dude. This verse and Johnny's were my favorites of the collab. Your verse was packed with multis in every line, it had the mechanics and was done well, probably the best flow and scheme in this drop also, I liked it, it vibed, it caught - I enjoyed reading it. That and you went into the detail of other drugs besides that green tree - GOOD job.

Uben - the king of the shittiest shit to ever drop. No, I'm joking.

Your first verse, honestly was the worst verse in the collab, the scheme was off, it seemed like everything in this verse was stretched but as it came to a close I could see you were catching back up to things, it started to look better. But without a decent flow and scheme I can't enjoy reading the verse.

That Tyson line at the end of the verse there though was fire, that's when I was started to grasp the scheme of things, so props on that.

Your second verse it felt like maybe you chopped a larger verse in two just to make 2 verses and put the hook between them, and match the line amount of Johnnys and Mordors maybe? Looks like you caught your scheme back, it flowed a lot nicer than verse one did. Some decent multis thrown here and there, again referencing more than just marijuana in this verse, which again I liked. Like I said flow was on point, seemed like a verse to just bob your head to kinda and go "yeah, that sounds like a good idea" This verse I liked because it seemed relaxed and chill like "let's just blaze and laugh about this dumb shit"

The imagery in your first verse was dope Uben, if you mixed that with the flow in the 2nd verse you'd have been golden. Imagery in verse 2 lacked a bit compared to the first also. Try to implement them both more simultaneously if you can.

Overall - I think this was a good drop, not dope - not ill, but acceptable. Mordor you definitely have room to elevate, get more consistent - and that's good that you have room because you're already dropping some dope stuff like that verse. I wanna see you do that on more Original topics though. Uben, you got room to improve, I tried to point out a lot of your flaws so you could work on them. Johnny, honestly I don't know if you can improve, you've been at this as long if not longer than I have - you know your mechanics, I think it's a matter of if on the given day you're really feeling the topic and wanting to write.

Nice job guys.

If you could PLEASE hit up my OM.

SS: Connection - Poor to Bad it'd be greatly appreciated.

[Uben. Sonned]

yeah my first verse was just a simple key written in like 2 seconds...I was bored, I even read it and was dissapointed in it...I'm working more and more on the flow of my verses cause my imagery is allready on point.
Thank you for the detailed feed and...
THAT WAS A MEAN JOKE!