house rules
check ins due asap versus due in 2 days im busy dood
this is my check
house rules
check ins due asap versus due in 2 days im busy dood
this is my check
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i need an extention till tomorow
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immaculations please your occupation is takin' ejaculation three times a day in any location,
so no hatin', homie im just bein true, i jacked your bitch cause she was "too-good-for-you",
its substance bitch, flowin like u never knew, gettin personal with your girl like you and your faggot crew
theres no excuse, this aint no virtual simulation, if your the king its your crown that im gunna be takin
dont be mistakin, ill bust a cap in your ass and leave you with constipation
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this little girl substance must have diarrhea of the mouth
her throat used to be constipated until i took my dick out
all i'm hearing from your direction is a bunch of screaming
and shouts while you in ya house sleepin with ya family i
toss a live grenade through your window & then i bounce
put the beam on ya house but you wouldnt be expecting
the missile im sendin dropping from the heavens now you
really livin in the south ya whole block gonna get wrecked
patriots bitch ya lucky i dont get the tanks and make you
dance while you wear ya moms blouse some pantyhose &
ya sisters mini skirt her thong would be on ya face but yo
im nice how am i gonna embarass yo ass at an arms race
you made no limit on this shit but i think it's been about 7
lines since ya whole rapping career turned to shit and left
you washin my dishes while im gettin served from yo bitch
i wont let you down lil buddy you wanted battle so im here
this warzone might be a lil too hectic for your styles but u
can sit on the bench watch hatin thinkin thoughts similar to
that of a queers you might wanna stop liking girls cause all
they feelin is ya big ass ears ya little dick is what they be
laughing at nigga to spit some real shit before you come at
me you should spark a few more blunts & chug more beers
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wow this was wack.
Ummm...neitehr of you came hard...at...all....I mean...even your structures...fucked.
Substance, work on your vocab...dude...elevate on your structure and work on writing a little more.
Immac. you need to work on your vocab as well, diarrhea jokes are pre-school, man, work on elevating to a higher level.
v// Immac....he tryed...
Here.&.There
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i dont understand you guys do you even understand my punches? because theres personal punches on this guy look at his profile and then see if u understand uppin.........
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Substance- A short, jumpy verse calling your opponent gay and saying you're fucking his girl. Kind of a general threat verse rather than one packed with punchlines, your structure made this irritating to read.
immalucations- cheers dude, that block of text i just read in now burned into my retina's for a week. SPACE YOUR LINES OUT. This was a long, jumpy verse calling your opponent gay and lay a bunch of threats in a narrative form in places rather than a series of dope punches. The structure made this annoying as fuck to read.
vote- substance, for a more coherant verse and better attempts at solid punches, plus his verse didn't disable my optic nerves.
Last edited by Johnny 6-feet; August 13th, 2008 at 11:09 AM
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ok first of all, kill the story bullshit dood, it'll never do anything unless you doing an audio diss. the structure was dumb, of course it was all parallel but it still didn't work for me. honestly, i couldn't tell what was suppose to rhyme and shit, regardless you didnt have any decent attempts at punches. it was pretty much like a huge waste of time writing all those lines dood. no hate im just being honest.
substance
ok i didnt get the 2good4u thing which i thought was totally wack, but ok i get it now it's his homo crew now. well you actually had attempts to throw punches which means you clearly should KO him, but that wont happen now. you just had stronger attemppts, now that your starting to learn how to rhyme fluent n shit, you should work on creativity, try and to create better punchline ideas with things most people wouldnt talk about you know. it's very difficult but it'll come.
wack battle here
vote: sub
thnaks for the votes uppin
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Both of you had shit structure and flow... you've both been on here too long to still be keying up shit like this... gotta do something cuz it's bad... real bad... but i vote Substance for actually being able to follow his shit and see punches and a rhyme scheme... kind of...
hit up the rip the bitch thread woot
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this battle was weak
both of you horrible structure and flow
v/ sub
his verse was more complex and had better attempts at punches
..but
both of you need major improvement
work on your rhyme schemes
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