Well I agree with Blue Eye in many ways, cuz alot of shit in here just didn't make much sense to me. The flow itself was choppy, and could use a tune up. I seen shit that you write, and this is shit compared to half your shit. No disrespect, but I just want to keep it real with you. Elevation is key, and critism is just a part of elevating. There's nothing else to really say, just keep writing. Much props, and respect.