Battle between good and evil

[AlphaMetric]

The fact of matter, I better on ever
I shed terror, they scare my anger
Not worth it for pussies, I just show I’m better
The battle between good and evil


My hand mangle on clock while boat
Too weak for bramble devil to strangle on rock bile hope
Angle on plot tile toke while dying caugh up blood
On my body which tremble babble
Dial crying doubt put hood to put bloody triangle on shot isle coke
that vile choke, with trap hope to never get out of this hole
Trapped coal to burn out of control, to worsen your life told story
When too godly, I’m something godly. Whenever out of this hasty cold
I’m frost, when tiddly as fuck, out of the bold misty
I’m out of list told by glued oddly world fantasy o mystery
That cease me because jealousy took over misery o history
Been a bit slippery and seen a wide wit bitterly of shit beyond the mist
The world upside down while I work hard at this
On some dope shit I don’t give a fuck about your glock
I’m godly with talk desire to put on fire some of this more mock
He aint say shit, mock it away, I’m too godly for your bunk ways
With mine on the bling, I sing on this scripture you flunk away
Yes flunk away, you an antagonist, and I ripe your ass to mishap
That crap you wits down without a vote, I’m too dope for your gay ass no show
row row your boat, I row my canyon through my godly state of glow
yeah I’m godly god

The fact of matter, I better on ever
I shed terror, they scare my anger
Not worth it for pussies, I just show I’m better
The battle between good and evil


I’m the devil, you ain’t no edible, I’m a rebel
The real side killer that swell up your door bell
Right down your throat to make you choke on spell
That’s well blown your town on spoke on well
With fiery haste and evil tales, shed a tear you faggot
I blast through maggots, yeah hide Bugsy, you traffic
When I put dick in line for practice, your like a quick flick
ma slave back in the days, you gay mofo afflict
you make me sick to be called a brother
but I guess that what it is, you motherfucking cunt
ya, I roll blunt of cocaine with a bit of sid when it shrunk
it gets me blasted for no pain when I do bad things
it’s okay to greedy and like bling, kill peoples and anything
you go to sleep and never awoke after these images put nightmare
and tare alive your every desire, to be god but I’m the devil
you tremble that I’m so evil, and your like a little weasel
hidden now and too scared to get out, you pout and shout
and cry out loud, cry about how depress you are, while I howl
I’m the king, master of this shit, and I command this shit while ya’ll bowl
Yea, I’m the evil devil

The fact of matter, I better on ever
I shed terror, they scare my anger
Not worth it for pussies, I just show I’m better
The battle between good and evil

As the battle prolonged, the world become unbalance
With crimes that runs the streets, with new technological advance
This is a story of good and evil, it will never end
Until then, I fight to defend my country till the end
No matter what goes wrong, I will always keep my head up
Shrug those tears off, lets be friends and remembers when we grew up

The fact of matter, I better on ever
I shed terror, they scare my anger
Not worth it for pussies, I just show I’m better
The battle between good and evil


links are comming

[AlphaMetric]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...jl-374056.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ng-374104.html

[AlphaMetric]

blah, 18 views, not feed...

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

To be completely honest..it was shit compared to your other pieces. I see you added more multies in the piece but half the time it didnt make sense. the flow was jumbled in and out of smootheness, the overall structure wasnt apparent. I felt you were just throwing words together that rhymed. for example:

My hand mangle on clock while boat
Too weak for bramble devil to strangle on rock bile hope

that line doesnt make any sense..

I’m out of list told by glued oddly world fantasy o mystery
That cease me because jealousy took over misery o history

same with this line, I found your use of grammar was shit. you commented on my use of an instead of and, and you informed me to learn proper grammar, I suggest you review your entire piece and realize that your grammar is about a 3 out of 10. Your vocabulary wasnt very impressive, since the lines were just crammed together, most of them didnt make sense, the ones that did were worded awkwardly, and the inconsistent flow had me fumbling while trying to read it.

I’m the devil, you ain’t no edible, I’m a rebel
The real side killer that swell up your door bell

this line had me thinking..Your the devil, but im not edible? so you cant eat me? an the swell up your door bell? are you planning on playing nicky nicky 9 doors on me? But I digest, you need to elevate serious. The other piece was structured alot better, it used coordinated thoughts and it didnt bounce around and it made somewhat sense. Overall on a scale of 1 to 10, ten being dope, one being wack, I have to give this around a 2-3. Sorry homie. No hate.

[AlphaMetric]

if you decrip this and you learn your vocab, youll see this piece has a meaning to it, and everyline has a ton of meaning of this what i'm trying to put out... so go to rhymezone.com and go put out the words you dont know what it mean and look it up... but it's you... some peoples may like it and relate to me about how i feel about good and evil... plz some more experienced feed who actually understand the meaning to this piece

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

sorry to kinda clog your thread, but please, explain to me the meaning of the first line of the first verse, the first line of the second verse, and experience? Dont think Im new because of the posts, Ive been dropping OM's for the past 2 years. Just not recently.

EDIT: Also, please, explain your entire chorus. Because the grammar in that is bunk. and also, dont use Rhymezone.

[antology]

Yea i dont know about this one man. You had some nice multis and some nice vocab for sure but i thought ya flow and ryhme scheme were a bit off man, some of the lines in this peice are really hard to read and understand what they mean, for example
"Dial crying doubt put hood to put bloody triangle on shot isle coke
that vile choke, with trap hope to never get out of this hole
Trapped coal to burn out of control, to worsen your life told story"

Had some nice rhymes but yea couldnt really understand them, but than again that happens in alot of peices where only the writer understands the peice fully.
Overall id give this peice a 7.5/10 man.
Stay up. Peace

[antology]

Reply to my new peice too man.

[AlphaMetric]

first off, its about your two side, battling for balance... but there will never be a balance cause there always that kind of wanting to do something bad, i dont know, you get said something that insulted you, right there, your bad side, well evil in this verse and a good side telling you not to do it, do good deads... and only then you will be godly, and the final verse puts an solid end to this saying thats its unbalance, the good and evil, crime in the streets, ect, and there the good, new technological advances and shit....

My hand mangle on clock while boat

here, i mangle on clock, my meaning, like destroy the bad before its too late, and a boat is hard, solid and wont brake, unless uses of like something... and that how i decribed the devil... I'm just trying to use original shit peoples wouldnt think about....
and the line right after it, saying in the good way the devil to weak to grasp hope....

I’m the devil, you ain’t no edible, I’m a rebel

okay, you were confused about edible, like in food terms, it means, peoples like to eat it because it good,.... well the devil saying to the good- god... is that, peoples dont like you... they wont listen... I'm just going out of the box ya know....


and the chorus is the good and evil having an argument... just try and look at it and guess who saying what...

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

okkaaay...good luck finding anyone whos goona understand that.

[AlphaMetric]

ill get right too it... this is pure decription of the good saying what he thinks about the evil....

"Dial crying doubt put hood to put bloody triangle on shot isle coke
that vile choke, with trap hope to never get out of this hole
Trapped coal to burn out of control, to worsen your life told story"

try to decrip this and tell me what you think it mean... trust me, i took my time to write this and made sure everything had a meaning

[AlphaMetric]

"Dial crying doubt put hood to put bloody triangle on shot isle coke
that vile choke, with trap hope to never get out of this hole
Trapped coal to burn out of control, to worsen your life told story"

I'm talking about how the evil side put drugs on the streets. put doubts in other peoples that there not able, only drugs and killing will cease there pain and agony, and only putting you in a hole,... which is gonna burn your soul and make you have a bad life.... ya know what i mean

[antology]

Man you can tell you have put alot of work into this peice ay, ive re read it and it was alot better, yourve done your research, which is good. I could tell the imagery was there you just need to know what it means really.

[AlphaMetric]

Man you can tell you have put alot of work into this peice ay, ive re read it and it was alot better, yourve done your research, which is good. I could tell the imagery was there you just need to know what it means really.

this prob took about 6-10 hours in 2 days.. and ill have more shit like this... challenge is to find out what it mean

[antology]

Leave feed on my peice man.