Dreamy (Soon To Be Audio)

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

Dreamy
蓝-眼睛.
[Blue Eye]

In my dream state, I stand in vascuous space,
crackin the case, as I chat with your face,
a track with the bass, claps with the haste,
in the midst, I see myself alone and collapse at the gates,
on the lovely, this world is cruel when it hugs me,
whats done for money, got me crued an disgusting,
feud over nothing, feed the fuel I brew when Im rusting,
I look in the mirror and you, now who am I trusting,
touching is real, feel the fibre of your woven fabric,
hold your magic, clutch for much more an hope to grab it,
the beauty in your eyes, had me stunned at the moment,
lust to be open an show just how much Im loving your potion,
tussle the ocean, this is true livin, not hustlers notion,
or motions of current so I can touch up your clothin,
bless my soul with the buddha, but now its for you,
no need to worry on my past, or what those cowards can do,
cause a second with them, is a lasting hour with you.

An this life, is temporary but the soul is eternal,
An this life, is temporary but my love for you's eternal,

I grasp at, a moment in time, an hold it divine,
froze in my mind, for a later component of rhyme,
I known it to shine, but this dream needs conclusions,
feed off you since, the Blue Eye became your nuicense,
and I kept dreaming, of life an what it could be,
if me, an you, formed we, itd be somethin to see,
I know I made some mistakes, if you hate me its fate,
but I hate to debate, when the topics our relationless state,
be greatful to make, a date to take a lakeful estate,
so we can relate an wait while we bake a plateful of date,
Its insane how I feel about you, loves the desire,
I crumble an spire, when I dream of hugs by a fire,
I would speak on us, but dont wanna fuck you an I up,
but still, we've never spoken, I dont even know if your real,
maybe love is an emotion of skill, Im hopin to feel,
you got me open its real, and so I focus my Ideal,
into surreal imagination, that Im flowin as real,

An this dream, is temporary but the soul is eternal,
An this dream, is temporary but my love for you's eternal,
An this life, is temporary but my soul is eternal,
An this life, is tempory but my love for you's eternal.
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[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

16 hours, 15 views, no comments. up 1

[AlphaMetric]

okay, first thing first, dont write an for and...... learn grammar... .. but this piece was kinda cool, i like how you made this piece flow but i think there is place for improvement, like multi syllable rhymes and up the multies, and the emotion and imagery was strong... keep it up....

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

umm ok.. up 2

[Giant.]

Good piece, Blue.

No worries about grammar...this is Hip-hop...not English class. Your structure and flow were both top-notch. Keep this shit up.

-Dope-

[Ink Poyzin]

Alot of views, but what the fuck is everybody sleeping for.... Anyhow this was alright, and the multis really brought it together. Seen a few spots that could use "little touch-ups", but for the most part it was on track. Some people have a tendacy to put random shit when using multis, and end up flushing the whole shit. You did ok though, and didn't throw me off with your flow. I didn't lose interest, and for as long as this was that's good.

This board isn't the way it used to be, just not as active. I don't understand why people would read shit, and than not give some respect. Some critism, and all that other good shit.

Anyhow good job man, and keep writing.. Much props, and respect.

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

word thanks for the props an props to you for keepin it real with me.

[Self: The "B" Side Prince]

up 3.