Candles & Heroine

[Axe.]

"Everyone is blind to the facts, not knowing what to stand for in life...
but I have someting to propose- a double helix represents our history."



"Tylenol Can't Take the pain away, but thats one less headache in the world."


A remedial reason opened them, as we appeared to be Ethiopian
Foolish, they took pain away, with needles of speed & opium
Drugs weren't the answer but the mind will show illusions
No confusion, the quick decision would only behold a bruising
The headache grew grim- witch such serious humor
Furry of rumors, said it could be such a serious tumor
Evil kicks in again, from hatred the lost rockets blast off
As mind traveled back to trash talk, now such a bad call
Fluid flows with the best of plasma to try and stop clots
Life is a fairytale, he's scared as hell as he jots thoughts
And plots, lots of dots, scotch, liquor slowed his heart- quicker
No water, because blood is thicker- imagine that a picture
Sunrise watched by drunk eyes blurry vision as lung glides
Mouth washed with fungi, just a thread in the dress of a young bride
So the pain in his head grew developed and spread flu, on purpose
Sneezing and deeply breathing, vastly bleeding- on the surface
The depression was yet to be doth through epic conception of sloth...
A leap towards faith, but one step in the wrong direction- your lost.
A meaningless glance, will quickly develop in such a serious gaze
Living your eyes trapped to stare back into a series of plagues
Champaign tears, dripping in the hour glass of life- theres no option
As your watching the last grain of sand just sink to the bottom
Prestigiously, prejudice downgrade evenly to believe I'm free!?
Leave me be!- to die with no soul next; to these measly trees!
Troubled, my intelligence doubled..."those were fighting words"
that must be why all my adjectives scuffled- face the puddle
Now, tell me what you see in the image below
See, the suspect doesn't realize the victim can grow
so he just sits until the temperature- hits twenty below
In this blistering cold, whats the warmth of a hearts worth?
I agree with those who plan to get rich like dark dirt
Fuck love, passion, emotion, its the cardiac thats emphasized
I invest the rest of what I have in my soul, to receive an enterprise




"Pioneer, is my example of a stereotype,
atleast it understands where I'm coming from."


Ahhhhh, the two things that relax the mind.

[Axe.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...on-373329.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-2-373334.html

[antology]

Very nice peice man, had nice rhyme and vocab, you arranged the wording very well to which kept a nice consistent flow it, which made it a very smooth read.

"The depression was yet to be doth through epic conception of sloth...
A leap towards faith, but one step in the wrong direction- your lost.
A meaningless glance, will quickly develop in such a serious gaze
Living your eyes trapped to stare back into a series of plagues"

Likes this bit of the peice the most, had nice flow and i liked the ryhmes.

Keep it up man.
Reply to "A Bleeding Earth" if you get time man

[D. Jizzle.]

Ahh.. you're back and this was dope as hell. The flow was great. The structre was easy to read. The vocab was nice. It was an easy read which slipped off the tounge. The topic was great, you really stayed on it with a creative story line. And a really great ending. Hit up The night of the boom, thanks, pz.

[_Lyrics]

very ill phade.. the flow was nice. the internals were what kept the read very very smooth. alot of symbolic lines with the imagery had nice connections to the topic. like the hour glass of life line. I didn't really feel like the intro was very relevant to your verse though neither was the pioneer quote, but the last line cracked a smile, clever. your verse was sick man, very slick shit with the wording and how you were phrasing a fading junkies mind and life. this was pretty much on point phade, good way to come back.

[EmceeWhite08]

Dat was real....that's what it is.......

[Kronikal Mindset]

Ye, on a topical standart, it has great flow, the structure and multies helped, of course, so ye, its definitly nice! All I can say is, dopeness!

[WordPloy]

sup phade

pretty nice and expressionate piece
lots of multies and a constant hot flow
topic was ripped tru like nobodies buisness, vocab was above average
the writing was very poetic. so all in all i was feelin it all the way
you had such constant multies that i thought i wrote this myself for a minute...haha


dope write

check out mine and p mortuus piece if u get time--

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...lf-373065.html

[Red Tha Baron]

Dope flow, multies were not amazing but still good. Vocab was straight too. I enjoyed reading this piece. Overall it was a nice flip of the topic, you approached it in a cool way.
"A meaningless glance, will quickly develop in such a serious gaze
Living your eyes trapped to stare back into a series of plagues
Champaign tears, dripping in the hour glass of life- theres no option
As your watching the last grain of sand just sink to the bottom"
&
"In this blistering cold, whats the warmth of a hearts worth?"
^^Those were my favortie lines.

[Axe.]

up...

[..Hannible]

The flow wasn't bad.
The vocabulary was nice.
Nice drop

[Hell-E]

I liked how your creative words linked nicely together, also quite a depressing stroy to go with it actually has a huge emotional feel to it, i like it.