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    Backstreet Spitting

    Yo, stop the music but leave the beat
    Listen to this backstreet spitting, so sweet
    I bring the heat when I compete
    Im one of the elite you can’t defeat
    Seven Eight (ate) nine, I killed nine
    Lyrics combine to bring you this line
    Shit that’s so divine you can’t define
    Amazing design and a flow that’s fine
    Sitting with my pen in a space that’s confined
    True freestyle, lyrics straight off my mind
    Scribbled straight onto my paper
    Sell this shit to get myself some paper
    Watch me freestyle, my style, so hostile
    I bring a vocabulary that is versatile
    Differentiate, im new but you can’t underrate
    Debate about my style but don’t hate


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    Re: Backstreet Spitting

    this was aight... this coulda been nice if you had tightened up some of the shit. Like the 789 line... when you said "i killed nine" you coulda gone into some wordplay but you left it at that... your rhyme scheme was also overly simplistic ("nine" and "mine" and "line" type shit) so it got a little boring to read towards the middle. The one two syllable rhyme you had in the whole piece rhymed the same word -_-

    I aint hatin, I'm just sayin that you could elevate a lot. The same goes for everyone at the beginning... work on metas & multis and you'll be on your way. O/A this was a 6/10.

    return the feedback on "Killin It (on that doom shit)"

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    Re: Backstreet Spitting

    Aight man first off, thanks for the feed back on mine...
    Now about this track, its pretty good u got the right idea but i think u need to strech ur sylibles a lil... Example...

    you have this wrote.....
    "I bring the heat when I compete
    Im one of the elite you can’t defeat"

    it would flow better if u went like...
    "
    I'm bringin the heat you dudes losen when I compeatin
    Im one of the greatest elite see you faggots can’t defeat me

    see how somthing like that flows, but if u have urs writtin jus the way u want thats cool but im jus tryin 2 help ya out..................
    all in all man i liked ur shit keep writing and keep it up ur pretty good.......
    Peace

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    Re: Backstreet Spitting

    I appreciate the constructive criticism from both of you. I'll try to take on board what both of you said to help me improve.
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