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    The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

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    The Last Two.
    Written By: Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    The screaming screen
    a computer geeks dream
    as it seems the data is read between
    the lines in time are tied to the strings
    which defines his mind as mines on a beach.
    he feelis like he walkin wit bombs tied to his sneeks.
    just to alarm the timing of she, he's lost.
    inbetween these cloths, ruff and ragged
    he's scuffed when tragic situations cross his madness.
    and have him, strutting like these missles were plastic.
    fighting for the seventh father who's missing his bastard.
    his mission was blasted, after the fact of wut arifats did,
    so now they asking, questions of who'll retaliate the fastest.
    they seek the masses based off oppinoins that are factless.
    speaking a language we've never learned or hardly practiced.
    kinda like speaking in tongue's backwards.
    because if you don't understand wut they're saying,
    what is the question that you're asking.
    Buddist, Islamic or Cathlioc doesn't explain baptist.
    Words subscribed on a dirty mattress.
    with oil stains, and spoiled names,
    it took a black man to pronounce change.
    with broiled brains, and loyal change.
    cents he's been spent, like loose dollars.
    just as quick as a child would lose fathers.
    or become martyr.
    You've dont bartered our roots collars.
    What the math do is release the shackles.
    We build pinnacles and laugh to.
    then perpretrate wind and blow past you.
    we don't perpretrate wins cause you're the last two.



    last two, I got speech bubbles to blast you
    and actions played out on cartoons from the past dude
    like SMACK, BOOM, got munchies for that fast food
    always quick to vomit in the toilet of my bathroom
    re-open my last wound, thirsting for crimson liquid
    to show me the same exact images I just depicted,
    it’s like I’m gifted, with a sixth sense to exhibit
    but when I throw course to the wind, I always end up winded
    and the sky’s definitely the limit, aint no way to pass it
    I wander through my mind like my body’s in a casket
    and that last fit? I threw it, reeled it back and cast it
    just to try to hook myself back up on this rap shit
    back up on this gat shit, nah back up on this hip-hop
    like I climbed the ranks so easily, I’m back up on this tip-top
    but I’m jumpin when the hits stop, crazy when the clip stops
    and the credits roll upwards, like realities just flip-flopped
    went from watchin’ over myself, to bein in my mind
    it was all just a dream, that leaked out from my spine
    rewound up my neck, and refocused my eyes
    reminded me of how my whole life was a lie
    and if my whole life is a lie, might as well just blast it
    to the back of my dome with another little tablet
    these shots are droppin rapid, I might as well be shafted
    drinkin the blood of catholics, every night on average
    cause I’m droppin bombs and my back is always crackin
    just for another trip down memorylane with my buddy Acid
    and I’m crashin, lights flashin as they pass through
    been droppin hits since Babe Ruth did, but these were my last two


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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    dope man , imagery was in this piece
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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    sick ass Hell this is one of the best drops I've read these past few days ... first off I'd like to say the flow was madd incredible... it flowed sooo smooth... the imagery was on point first verse was simply nice.. Point blank no real flaws in it what so ever vocab was god... the description was on point and I liked the complexity with in the bars... also had a very nice structure and rhyme scheme... the second verse was madd good to like how you flipped some lines around here and there that really brought creativity to your drop... your flow was also mad good and really stood out... imagery was on point ass well... I mean overall I think this drop was madd sick... imagery, creativity, description, flow, complexity, and topc... yall executed very well and keep the reader interested throughout the piece... 10/10 keep writing

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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    Okay, I really liked this...not for the overall concept or whatever but for the way it was written, the flow, rythm and clever phrases that decorated this piece.

    N: Good verse man, clean flow made it easy to read plus due to it's fluidity I didn't have to stop-start at any given time. Mainly, I liked the clever phrases which went with the flow.

    Syn: Same thing really, though the flow picked up and took a different turn it was excellent. You again had clever lines like that course to the wind, feel winded one...it was good..plus like N's the way your words went with the flow was very good.

    Overall, I liked this so i'm going to nominate it.
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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    up top.
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    "You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!

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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    touch the flag.
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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    just to alarm the timing of she, he's lost.
    inbetween these cloths, ruff and ragged
    he's scuffed when tragic situations cross his madness.
    lol, nasty shit N

    but I’m jumpin when the hits stop, crazy when the clip stops
    and the credits roll upwards, like realities just flip-flopped
    this was nice too

    overall, I thought this piece was nice, N set it off dopey with the multis and specific flow that i know you accustomed to, damn man you had some cool imagery in there an alot of fluidy lines that i was feelin. alot of ill ideology connecting to the topic of being the last two in syanical verse, the flow was cool and there were some ill thought provoking lines in it, cool collab, kept my interest the whole time and was a quick and easy read. props
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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    This piece was organised chaos to me, you both came with a continuous stream of multi's and fractured imagery which was hard to follow in places if i'm being honest. The vocab was strong too but i'll be damned if i know exactly what you guys were talking about. I think this could do with a more coherant focus, although you both demonstaited great techniques as writers.

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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    just glide.
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    "You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!

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    Re: The Last Two by Ntalek ft. SyaNidal

    one more bump before the months end.
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    "You're gonna hear me out." Yeah, hear me out on this!

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