ever been lost..

[Nemesis.]

ever been lost..
by: Lay




Ever want something so bad you can taste it....



She's outta my grasp, I let outta laugh to try an play it off
another day is gone, an its still her boyfriends love she's stayin on -






He mistreats her an takes her for granted.. I can't fuckin stand it
if I handed her my heart,..I wonder if she'd take it or just stand pissed
my love's been branded by her mark, I want to find out what this trance is
I didn't plan this or for things to end up like this..
her with him an me alone..it was just poor decision that took a wrong turn
an I'm draggin behind her as I get carried along burned.
I feel like I'm the filling bar's purposely placed in a long verse.
an when a love songs heard - I ressemble some miserbale pawn hurt.
I'm stuck on her..she's in my head like brain cells.
an all this pain remains felt as I keep it balled up inside my vain self.
as a stirring hate swells while I take it out on my body to raise welts.
still my feelings remain stealthed..
If happiness is wealth, then I guess this a humble welcome to poverty
laying here still sobbering, with my heart an mind wrecked while pondering
there's nothing left to bother me.. I'm in a sedated state except not asleep.
head over heels as I'm left hovering grounded
her love - with a hand at my throat I feel like I'm smothering without it
this is another love thats doubted, postponed but inevitable..
all this tension rules my thoughts inner depths of regrets that you'll
never be mine, my methods unconventional but will let you
define my love an reveal that its sensible, breathtaking an intentional
love is an invention you'll wish had a warranty to catch you
when you fell...an I"m still falling for you..still waiting

I had you once, but I feel like I've lost you
an when it comes to us,..without you I feel like I'm lost too.






She's outta my grasp, I let outta laugh to try an play it off
another day is gone, an its still her boyfriends love she's stayin on -




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[Nemesis.]

I'll have links up shortly.

[Nemesis.]

open for feed..

[Spoken Deity]

this wasnt that bad...
Some of your imagery just needs to be re-worded. But overall, not bad.
The emotion is there enough to make me think this is how you feel. As if you are actually in love with someone you cant touch... Thats hard to do, well done on that. Some of your imager is awesome..

If happiness is wealth, then I guess this a humble welcome to poverty
laying here still sobbering, with my heart an mind wrecked while pondering

This line IS SO GOOD...
Just work on a more intelligent rhyme scheme, stronger words in overall vocab and some illiteration...
Well done sir

[Nemesis.]

Thanks for the feed man, appreciated.

[Spoken Deity]

hit links too... that will get people to read your shit...
leave feedback on the bigger names and youll get their ideas

[Seedy]

lyrical this drop was lyrical you got skills