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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    this was pretty creative man. Though in some places i feel you just threw in words..or even lacked some words. Other than that it was an odd piece..im not used to reading things approached like you did this one...it was an interesting read. I didnt know really where u were going with it...but i kept reading because i was interested haah. I feel though you should deffinitley work on your wording..I felt you tried to add emotion though you barley captured it because of your choice of wording...you dont have to curse to show emotion..try and find other ways to capture it ..imagery..wasnt bad i knew what u were sayin just the way u said it was the weird part lol

    idk man average piece....work on that stuff i said...6.5/10

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    I usually try and encourage rappers... but I have to straight tell the truth here..

    I sware this nigga sounded like Prodigy from Mobb Deep. Half of ya rhymes weren't even rhymes... real talk...You opener rhymes wacko, with freckles and sicko.... I mean from there I was already turned off... but you didn't fail to dissapoint.

    You proceeded to drop more lines right after this combo with an even more confusing rhyme scheme:

    I’m a myth of mythology of science of life
    Creating living things but became sick and dying
    Too many problem in my life making me suffering
    Bullying became a part of my life for unspoken reasoning
    becoming lazy, rooming 24/7, smoking

    I mean... this is a ramble on bar... where I honestly dont even know whats "supposed" to rhyme. FAIL!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by MaNic_DePreSion View Post
    I usually try and encourage rappers... but I have to straight tell the truth here..

    I sware this nigga sounded like Prodigy from Mobb Deep. Half of ya rhymes weren't even rhymes... real talk...You opener rhymes wacko, with freckles and sicko.... I mean from there I was already turned off... but you didn't fail to dissapoint.

    You proceeded to drop more lines right after this combo with an even more confusing rhyme scheme:

    I’m a myth of mythology of science of life
    Creating living things but became sick and dying
    Too many problem in my life making me suffering
    Bullying became a part of my life for unspoken reasoning
    becoming lazy, rooming 24/7, smoking

    I mean... this is a ramble on bar... where I honestly dont even know whats "supposed" to rhyme. FAIL!!
    deep indide, you know this is 100x better then that shit u drop man.... and i can already see your a total newb at this and which is why u do not deserve my feed... u ask for rhymes...
    living/dying/making/suffering/bullying/reasonin/rooming/smoking..... all in those last 4 lines you quoted.... thoses all rhymes beleive it or not...

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    Shits ill son.

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    Oh... so any word with "ing" at the end rhymes....*shrugs*... what do I know.

    Besides the "claim to rhyme" rhyme scheme, the topic sounded creative... but this shit plain just "didn't rhyme" and this is a rap subforum, not the poerty subforum... so I gotta just tell you how it is...

    You just started talking at one point... not rapping. Exactly like Prodigy has sucumb to in the last few years. You cant figure a rhyme so just either talk for a few lines... or force a rhyme.

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    Quote Originally Posted by MaNic_DePreSion View Post
    Oh... so any word with "ing" at the end rhymes....*shrugs*... what do I know.

    Besides the "claim to rhyme" rhyme scheme, the topic sounded creative... but this shit plain just "didn't rhyme" and this is a rap subforum, not the poerty subforum... so I gotta just tell you how it is...

    You just started talking at one point... not rapping. Exactly like Prodigy has sucumb to in the last few years. You cant figure a rhyme so just either talk for a few lines... or force a rhyme.

    blah blah... 1 out of 11 peoples saying it's crap.... im ready to bet that if i gave him good feed, he'd worship this piece

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    no... real talk... this shit is garbage.

    You didn't even give me feedback... what reason do I have to lie. I clicked this topic to see if you were being a hypocrite by telling me to follow the rules. Only to read it and become insulted you even said ANYTHING to me.


    Oh... and believe me. This forum has dickryders.

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    Lmfao!!!!

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    Quote Originally Posted by ..Randomized.. View Post
    Lmfao!!!!
    Word.......

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    Quote Originally Posted by kilaplaya View Post
    Word.......
    word........

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    up???

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    U got some skills but u need 2 write a lil better, its deffinitly better than the one i looked at....

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    THis wasnt bad at all. Id say it would be good to continue looking at doper heads and taking what you can from their writting. Get into multis, more intricate imagery, stronger vocab and even more wit...
    For a guy whos starting out, you're dropping really well. Much better than I was when I started.
    Well done sir... keep it up

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    Re: Myth of Mythology

    upping

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    upppppppppp, come on i want some feed from vets

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