Confession of Depression

[Bigot Hitman]

In these long days and nights, i'm lose'in my mind
My world's sun and moon are just refuse'in to shine//
Or maybe its my fault that i can't see the light
If suicide thoughts return i hope god's with me to fight//
Alone without problems is better than freedom's strife
Listen, all i've done is wrong so why not "read my rights"?//
Take a look around and see nothing beside me's good
I should join the army cuz i don't care for my livelihood//
My fields aren't grass somethings' put painful turf in
But i don't say fuck the world, i'm not a hateful person//
The real me is peaceful but depression hides him nicely
I'm so confused cuz the mouth i feed tries to bite me//
My mind's stuck in traffic and time's not making it clearer
Now this self hatred has me screw-facing the mirror//
I can't see the top of this foggy up-hill crawl
and even though i'm not standing i feel i can still fall-
-to the point of no return, and if that is stress'in me
Then the companions i don't have will be of necessity//
I reminiscence and see a kid digging the deepest hole
Today he's so low in the ground he can't reach his soul//
Believe me, crying is by no means a lack of fortitude
I just wanna go back and create things to look forward to//

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[Bigot Hitman]

Wow, i didn't expect so many comments from this forum.

[uncontrollable flow]

Quick feedback, haven't got much time.

Like the concept and can feel the emotion, nice flow, it was on point. Rhyming was average i would say, vocabulary could be increased.

I reminiscence and see a kid digging the deepest hole
Today he's so low in the ground he can't reach his soul//

Really feeling this part, that was actually dope.

Overal it was very good, but always room for improvement.

[Dekken]

I thought this rap was pretty good dude, i was pretty impressed but like Zedbrar says theres always room for improvement, ur emotion in this song is really nice b/c as reading I can kinda of feel whut ur talking about.
All in all i give u props fer this one....

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