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    gods plan?

    hey just wrote crit please

    sometimes i wanna wonder who i am
    others i seem to just not give a damn
    dont no where im goin dont no where the fuck im from
    how am i inmeant to grow up when i dont even got a mum
    taught myself things boys wouldnt even no at my age
    like how to grip a gun and how to control my rage
    evefr since i can remember
    this gang been treating me as if i was a family member
    only place i could go
    only place that feel closest to home
    is being alone being confined in a small space on my own
    thats the only time i feel i fit into this world
    and you wanna ask me how the fuck my life turned out to be so wrong

    hook
    im just livin life the way god planned
    never asked for much
    is there a reason i still stand
    when its my time to leave this world ill question
    is it hell im goin or is it heaven x2

    ive never been the one to rob for money
    never had the thought in my head of goin crazy
    you probly thinkin how do i do it
    when youve been living on the street longer then i have
    you just get use to it
    i seen drug deals gone wrong
    heard gun shots goin of all night long
    but never am i scared to walk the streets alone
    i put my faith into gods hands
    what ever happens is part of gods plans
    never was i taught to back down from any man
    dont let fear hold me back my fears i confront them
    everything i seem to do just takes me to the start again

    hook
    im just livin life the way god planned
    never asked for much
    is there a reason i still stand
    when its my time to leave this world ill question
    is it hell im goin or is it heaven x2

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    Re: gods plan?

    I thought the rhymes were a bit basic, need to use more complex words not just "age, rage or "wrong, long". Flow not too bad man. I like reading this peice just a bit plain man. Keep writing.
    Check out my peice "my letter to heaven" if ya get time man.

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    Re: gods plan?

    eyo thiz was iight. kinda felt it ya kno

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    Re: gods plan?

    thanks for the replys yeh ino there bit basic just gettin the hang of all this rappin stuff

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    Re: gods plan?

    how old ru

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