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    Nowadays, it's a mistery

    CHORUS
    No wage could ever define my rage
    everyday could of done mistakes
    Passed them on and tag-it
    Like magnet
    On a refrigerator like regenerating ma beef
    when I seek freak to bash when they speak
    aren’t they naughty and deserve to be beat
    but nowadays, It’s a mystery
    CHORUS


    Seeking to bashing out
    Smashing ding-a-long doubt
    While bounding fists to pound
    Don’t know where to go about
    Should I kill this fucker right now?
    High energized about to blow this fucker out
    Shred to pieced along tined line
    Sniff it thinking it’s cocaine time
    But it’s all games in your mind
    Luckily
    I haven’t gotten hooked to it
    Because I’d be shredded to bits
    And that aint cool shit



    And nowadays a mystery
    Feeling query with this sense of knowing secrets
    Been bash and mash through ma experience
    But one day bound to glory
    for now, I have grown through fist and mist
    with little hope to understanding this stress
    with ma room thresh to a mess
    I want to explain to you how I feel
    How I get on the real deal and keep it chill
    While inside in a world of hate and uncertainty
    only eating away my history



    CHORUS
    No wage could ever define my rage
    everyday could of done mistakes
    Passed them on and tag-it
    Like magnet
    On a refrigerator like regenerating ma beef
    when I seek freak to bash when they speak
    aren’t they naughty and deserve to be beat
    but nowadays, it’s a mystery
    CHORUS

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    links are coming in da morning, have fun

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    pretty good piece yo. seemed like you had fun writing this, ...
    flow was real cool, vocab was good in parts
    i think te chorus was more like another verse, - being so long and all, but was good still
    so yea you had good character in this rap
    perhaps you could of added a touch of visual imagery to make the piece more interesting
    good read though

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    pretty clearly written for audio, however, it will more likely be far better received in that form than it does as it appears right now. the meter was cool, flowed well, but the content was just kind of whatever to me. it all lacked direction or true motive. the chorus again, jumped around, and is all around kind of unnecessary. just wasn't for me.

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    ya atti, this prob was more for audio, but untill i get a mic, ganna have to post writtens lol

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    you can record through old headphones, or buy one of the 8 dollar mics from staples.

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    ya, im thinking about that, but im not sure if i got the voice to rap, but i know i can write shit that flow real well, and i think ive goten much better throught this site with all the tips im getting

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    also, writing from 11pm to 2:30 am, lol, didnt think about adding deph to it haha

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    Re: Nowadays, it's a mistery

    it was an alright piece the hook was the best in my opinion keep it up

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