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    Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    Mommy, do Jews Have Souls?

    Tucked into bed; dreary, drowsy head...
    Against the softest quilts spread, not a single lousy thread
    Whispered prayers on lips, the same repeated scripts...
    No eclipse of tradition, they always end with mother’s lips.
    A kiss on the cheek, from her nurturing face, so sweet...
    But instead of “Goodnight”, mother’s greeted with a peep.

    “I’m sorry to ask you...but, if Heaven’s the goal...
    Mommy, can you tell me...do Jews have souls?
    I know Daddy’s job is to round up every one...
    Come at them like a mob; pointing, firing guns.
    But I also see their kids, some no older than me...
    Dragging feet, leaving skids; pried away from family.
    I see tears in their eyes; see their mother’s cry...
    As headlocks are applied, box cars get supplied.
    Daddy says they’re evil, a sick and rancid people...
    And Hitler says it legal, The Reich's keeping our race regal.
    But they cry just like I do, need their mommies too...
    In the snow subdued, they’re no different than me and you.”


    “Please, darling, sleep...for the Jews you shouldn’t weep...
    They come from stock so cheap, they’re a burden cuz they’re weak.
    Plus they pass disease every time they have to sneeze...
    Every one must be seized, and your father has expertise.
    So, no...since you must know...Jews, they have no souls...
    I’m sure they’re sent from Satan and are trying to take control.
    Your Daddy’s so heroic, always stoic in his duty...
    And from now on, you’ll know it; he’s protecting Anglo beauty.”


    Another kiss, hands through hair...then she’s gone and down the stairs...
    Leaving her son to rise, look out the window below to the square.
    4 stories down is Daddy, MP-40 out and handy...
    Herding hundreds of Jews through while officers sip on brandy.
    As he snacks on snuck-in candy, he spies Daddy and others react...
    With unloaded rounds towards the ground at something small and compact.
    Shrill screams follow, female and male alike...
    As rock candy’s suddenly swallowed, and lodges in his windpipe.
    A guttural gasp, tiny eyes frightened and wide, veins pop in his face...
    Life’s lost...and past, he drifts outside; then feels a warm embrace.

    “I’m scared and alone...just like you are...
    No going back home, instead we’ll journey towards stars.
    But Mommy prepared me, not to be scared, see...
    Said we’d soon be going to Heaven and feel God’s charity.
    Warned this day would come, at the hands of men with guns...
    But she promised God would love me as brightly as the sun.
    And I see you’re loved as well, we’re both rising to the light...
    Leaving this earthly Hell, arriving in His kingdom tonight.”


    “What’ll happen to Mommy and Daddy? If they’re both wrong...
    Will I ever see them again, with their beliefs so strong?”


    “I can’t answer that with truth, I’m just a little kid like you...
    But we can share my parents, they’ll be joining us real soon.”
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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    this was just a nice drop B...i havent seen you in these neck of the woods in a while man...only in SS. i was saying to myself "i wonder if vets still lurk around here" word up. this shit here was just a nice verse...the vocab of course was well done and thought out aswell as the flow as you do you its ill man... you kept the pace good and for rhyme sake if i recall you had little switches like some wu-tang click clakc rap shit nah mean!
    the whole story telling shit and person view speech aswell dude man...was ill man. i was just really bobbing my head to this verse...shit i even put a beat on for this shit to just catch your flow and it never ot me fell off nah mean!...lol! props on this man...

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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    Yea this was most definatly a good drop fam... I mean the descrption alone was sick you had a nice ass flow ... and you executed the concept fam... I'll have to say this was really an outside the box drop... I thought it was unique and you had your own styllle.... vocab was on point... and the complexity was cool too... I mean overall this drop was just plain out good... fam would like to see me work from you fam 9/10 keep doing you
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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    Perfect. Not sure if it can be described much differently. Seriously gets the mind thinking some serious thoughts. The title had me a little curious and was not really sure what I was getting myself into, but this was pure. Nice drop!

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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    Wow, that shit was nice. Some great flow in their with everything else mixed together for a nice smooth drop. Good shit bro for real
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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    Quote Originally Posted by Born To Kill View Post
    Mommy, do Jews Have Souls?



    [FONT="Comic Sans MS"][I]“Please, darling, sleep...for the Jews you shouldn’t weep...
    They come from stock so cheap, they’re a burden cuz they’re weak.
    ^
    From stock so cheap? Iunno didnt read well and semed clumsy.





    4 stories down is Daddy, MP-40 out and handy...
    Herding hundreds of Jews through while officers sip on brandy.
    As he snacks on snuck-in candy,
    ^
    Yeaaaah, feeling that segment, flowed sickly


    A guttural gasp, tiny eyes frightened and wide, veins pop in his face...
    Life’s lost...and past, he drifts outside; then feels a warm embrace.
    ^
    Nice visuals

    “I’m scared and alone...just like you are...
    No going back home, instead we’ll journey towards stars.
    But Mommy prepared me, not to be scared, see...
    Said we’d soon be going to Heaven and feel God’s charity.
    Warned this day would come, at the hands of men with guns...
    But she promised God would love me as brightly as the sun.
    And I see you’re loved as well, we’re both rising to the light...
    Leaving this earthly Hell, arriving in His kingdom tonight.”

    ^
    Nice, flow was on and so was the imagery/style



    “I can’t answer that with truth, I’m just a little kid like you...
    But we can share my parents, they’ll be joining us real soon.”
    ^
    Yep.
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    I'll be honest, i'm kinda sick of reading about Jew related stories especially in relation to Nazi Germany. Shit is old press, do something on the gypsies that got annihilated or Stalin's mass genocide.

    But, i gotta give you props, cos this was a kosher piece haha

    The opener was a little awkward but when the verse got to the dialogue the story really kicked in and your writing came to the fore. I've left the pieces above tha caught my eye and made me enjy the read.

    the first two/three segmentsdidn't really show much in the way of novel writing/expression etc, coulda worked a little more on tightening up the story.

    Nice end to this too, and even the story had a different take on a well travelled subject. The Jewish mother married to a Nazi, and the kid dying from candy as opposed to some cliched death.
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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    yea tite ass flow b2k, i like the way you put the jackanory accross,
    the vocab was nicee and constant.... you added charisma to an otherwise sad concept..
    maybe i'm off on one, but i thought you was spittin from Hitlers sons perspective, if so an interesting take on the subject.... so yea nice 1 on this joint, nuff said

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    Re: Mommy, Do Jews Have Souls?

    nice piece.
    While reading ti i could make visuals of what i was reading playing the piece in my head.
    The structure, flow, and vocabulary was nicely down and suited the piece.
    Emotion was there, I seen a few multis which i enjoyed.

    All around nice piece.
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